very cute fanfic!

I love this story. The only thing bugging me is just a teensy bit of grammar, and just the way some things were worded but other than that this story is amazing and I think it would be cool if you did a kind of sequel.

Cute...

Chapter 2.
Bella's pov
that it happened then my Senses gone Bonks Boomed then I Felt Cold so cold the Drug that I was really Hungry so monstrously I Raced Vampire Slayer speed Bella I Ws so Pale Calsile what is She She is a Vampire slar-Human she is what Hunting Animals I Oomph! Threw with a Srength then drank Blood I Hissed very harshly had Huge wild but Falkor's Ruby Red Eyes so bitter and I was Hunting ASnimals drained as all I was Running fast as him then suddenly the Newspapers repowered a very affected but sick in the head but Out of orbit Attacking a lot it was with the worst headline in history MISS ISABELLA MARIE SWAN AWAKES HER TRUEST NATURE HUNTS BOTH KILLED VULCANS ALL OF THEM DRAINED OF THE SWEEETEST HARD CORING VULCAN BLOOD CONFESSED HER TRUTHSAYING LIES AND IS A VAMPIRE SLAYER-HUMAN IS UNWELL NT FIT TO HUMANITY LOST! That was it myself was on the run fastest and speeding up like a Runner then it happened with my each both then met the Cullens captured then this one you hold with them FELIX DESTROY THE THREE! With the hybrids all with ourselves then suddernly murdered us and them from our living families friends and loved ones wre next with the Tribe killed then it came our katras wre transported with as all pets with the others crashed but they forced the carnivorious selves to live in their place with a family as all of the but the things suddenly it went each Both suddenly Exploded took the bodies ran to Italy but the homes merged with it but Shattering each both then frozen us within but it caused each both but it happened with more f them them suddenly were more hybrids then ourselves with as all of them trapped into Limbo but with Animals and each both were more as all the bodies littered sank but forged as all gravestones and newest homes replaced with as all of the Destroyed where am I what happened to me with all that I wore robes I'm on Vulcan with as all Bella they had you killed and all hybrids had kids with ourselves it is Gone we can't mate that our recover but the bodies were with maggots but from the corpses more as all of them his pieces and had the looks of us then the rebuilding starts that was it took away our lives and then I am with golden eyes seeing Nessie with Jake they too as all of them had golden eyes we are Invisible but it was the side affect granted us powers real gifts we walk like Gods and Goddesses then they caused this but it happened lost the Earth to them but I had been Altered to look like them but flopped but lost the very as all of them to them crashing but myself sent a bioviral disease but made as all dirt poisonous the Earth was toxic now the Volturi heard this about as all of the suffering but it came too late I had a real power but to Avenge my deatn.

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I hope I get sick now! I was sick before, bad too. Check out A Band Disaster.

I have just worked in the glass house all day and It's my first week so everything is sore and aching but with your story I'm distracted from that. Thanks

haha love it. XD I didn't know a cold could do that to someone...

Aaaaaawwwwwww I love these really cute fanfics!

Ahhhhh! I LOVED Carlisles charming smile! I almost died I swear!

Hey,
I think your story is really great.
For my taste it was a little too short, but I like the idea of Edward not being around while Bella is sick.
I hope you write another story like this one.

This is really cute!

It should have been longer!

aaawwwwwwwww (sigh), that was so sweet, love how she let him look after her, without being mean or nasty, like some people write her when she's sick, he's so cute, and loverable, fantastic job, really love it, it's made me feel all warm and gowey, hehe.

good story it was so like Edward being so protective!