That was awesome! OMG I think you should really write more even if some others say other wise you are an amazing writer!

Keep writing! It's really good

OK, that was intense and hot! Were you finished, or is there more? C/D FOREVER!

Fuck yeah that was hot! X

Okay, kiddie, your story is awful. Typical. For one thing, 'pussy' is a vulgar and degrading term, and should never be used. A turn on? No. And you sound like a virgin. But well informed? Um, no. I knew more than that when I was in sixth grade. It is this magical thing called the sex speech given to you by your teachers. And 'cock', again, vulgar. I don't give two flying fucks if it's degrading to men because I am a feminist, not lesbo, and think all men are assholes. Please try harder to do well, I write much better, and it is a matter of practice. Avoid the vulgar slang next time, slut.

OMG! it was so good! pleaze update ASAP!

Ooh la la! Derek and Chloe gettin it on! lol

Jeez how I wish there was more of this.

Ooooohhh shit... There is NOTHING better than a cocky derek! He should be like that more often

holy shit that was so hot! write more lol;)

Very very good! :] bravo! Hehe.

so sick

so sick

omg! whoa gurl! o dude... :/

great lemon