Nesecito la parte 11!

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It was good... I could've said excellent, but he grammar was everywhere... Before you publish a fanfic or anything for that matter, you should ALWAYS proofread your work. I know how exciting it is to finish a story, and want to publish it RIGHT after typing the last word. However, the story comes off as poorly written, or half-ass work when not proofread... I know it's a bit of a drag to proofread it all, but trust me, it's worth it when you get nothing but AWESOME reviews that don't include Grammar Nazis (like myself)... Again I would've rated it excellent if it weren't for all the mistakes... Yes, it also needed a few tweaks to the story to make it a wee bit better, but grammar is the main issue.. Besides that, I think Kiba and Hanabi should have been canon.. So cute..

*sob*

THAT WAS BEAUTIFUL!

:) not bad, update soon please he looks like he might have feelings for tenten...

nice!
can u do a kiba/kin chapterp plz?

Well...he is a sexy beast...Lol

Please update again soon!

:D Great work!

If I may, can I ask for a chapter with a OC of mine? :) Reply back wit ha yes or no please, and if it's a yes, I'd be happy to provide you with any and all information needed for her.

All the same, I'll happily keep reading. _ Keep up the great work!

Keep updating I love this story :D it's so good mmmm Kiba . . . :D

I would like a kiba and temari chapter a long one there is not enough of kibatem and you already had kibaino my favorite

KIBATEM! KIBATEM! Keep it up

Whoa Whoa Whoa, kiba you are such an badass playing with the girls feeling and then fu ck them damn I like that. ;)

I hope you done mind if I can request an kibaten scene, or if not an threesome with Nejitenkiba, but Nah it would make Tenten an slut.

But hey I really like this story, it's not one of those easy go stories, nor is it tense, yet somewhat simple so Yea i'm enjoying it Lol xD

Keep it up.

A good chapter, Kiba/Kurenai would be hot to see.