That was a very sweet story.

I'm so happy I found your stories. You captured their emotions so well!

Love the story, it's so sweet! Keep writing, and I love your grammar! U rock!

Cheers!

~Cinammonbear200

this has a nice calming mysterious quality to it. Nice

Another great Jack & Lizzie story. Keep it up.

Love it!

Honestly, all I can say is 'awwh'! :) This was an adorable little one-shot, though a little fast-tracked. It's understandable, of course, that the speed of this piece had to be kept somewhat quick in order to keep in pace with the song. I looked up the song on YouTube, by the way, and you're right- it DOES have some sort of haunting quality. It was very fitting to the scene.

On a slightly more constructive front, I felt that at points, CJS slipped a little out of character. He seems to wear a sort of mask throughout the trilogy. Outwardly, he’s a carefree individual, but inwardly, he's profound. He isn't someone who'd admit his true feelings immediately... not even to himself. That aside, this was a lovely read.

'"Mistress Ching," she muttered finally, not meeting his eyes.

Jack flopped back onto the sand, laughing heartily. "I knew it," he gasped.' - HAH! I laughed out loud at that. A good hint of humour. Both Jack and Elizabeth know how not to lie... and yet cover up the truth! Love it. :)

'Although it wasn't the first time they'd kissed, this kiss was entirely different from the one they'd shared aboard the Black Pearl. That kiss, too, had been passionate, but it had been fueled by the desperate need to save lives and marred by the despair of having to sacrifice his.' - This was adorable. It effectively and justly describes their first kiss aboard the Pearl. Well done. :)

The ending was lovely. The final sentence pulled everything together so beautifully.

I'm looking forward to reading more of your work. :)

MsAurora

Awww, you're so sweet! Thank you!

I really do love, love, love this story. You're such a good writer! I can't wait to see what you'll come up with next.

Again, well done on another great story. Good job!

Talk to you soon!

~Michelle~

love it!