Great one shot I love the sweet and romantic moments ash and may had especially the first kiss ash and may shared together advance shipping is my main favorite shipping ash and may two of my favorite characters in the Pokemon anime advance shipping forever If u can can you make more advance shipping stories please

KAWAII!well done!

Please don't tell me that may and ash are still 10...

good

awesome!

Gwaaah another great one-shot from youuu! ; u ;

You are so good. Pfffft, screw it. I'm adding you to my favorites!;D

And for a 'critique', I didn't see anything wrong to be honest. :3

The only part was that I thought the ending was a bit rushed was all.

I think next time you should write a lot more emotion and imagery into a last epic scene like that.

Like for example: As their lips parted. Ash's eyes glistened from the moon light. He gasped... blah blah

Yeah, sort of like adding in 'extra effect' if you will.;3

(Please don't kill me.; 0 ; I still L.O.V.E YOUR STORIESSSS! ; u ; )

Anyway, your my new favorite and I can't wait to see more more and moreeee! ~

great.

make them "fight" and then get them alone is my suguestion

Good Job! That was a cute story with a great ending! Keep it up

-Fallout96