The ending was kind of anti-climatic, as others have probably stated ; I guess the main issue is that it doesn't resolve Lucas' feelings or really look into Barry's feelings for them breaking up. I still loved the rest of the story though. Barry and his Skittles made me laugh, and I loved the inclusion of some other NPCs we usually see in the game but don't pay much mind to.

~ Queenie

Well, the first four chapters were great! The sort of friendship-come-chemistry between the two was really well done.

he ending sucked, though. You really could - and should - have done a better job. Still, at least I can imagine a better ending.

The ending was the worse I've ever read...O.O

That. Was. The. Worst. Ending. EVER.

But! I totally love the story, too bad this didn't end up the way I expected it... A-Anyway, I can't really judge, I haven't finished any story myself and I suck at one-shots so... Naoki sucks so much than you do

Ash would never date Dawn... He's friendzoned every girl from Misty to Hilda! XD

I merely jest, anyway, sad to know I'm about to finish it.

That escalated quickly... I once tried cleaning the park but I didn't last 5 minutes waha.

I like the Justin Bibarel part though, had a very good laugh

S-So cute... I never knew someone could make these kind of stories interesting. I mean, the plot XD

Yup, I like where this is going too but right now, I have to sleep and reserve this for tomorrow.

Jacked up dude

I enjoyed it a lot. The switching views where interesting, and it's a unique ending. Most are happy endings but this rather neutral ending is a nice change. The ending was a little anticlimatic, but still an OK one.

Words can des ribe my love for this ;_; update soon please

WHY IT NO END IN THEM FUCKING?
Lol. But really chappie five just kinda made me ugh.

...i want them to be together. But nontheless, this fic was great and i loved their emotions. Somehow you managed to keep them in character even though lucus doesnt even have a character. Im confusing myself.

I throughoutly love this fic, although the ending was so anti-climatic it almost ruined the whole thing for me :/ still love it though!

I really liked that story it was adorable and surprising at times. I also think that you have a wonderful writing style however the last chapter feels rushed and almost foreign to the route of the story, certainly not the emding I was hoping for or expecting... but, well can't do anything about now can I?

Still a brilliant fic nevertheless!

Thats... the end... but... what about... they arent together... That isn't a very happy ending at all...