omg, like, dis was da best thing i've ever read; u write so well, idk how to say dat i luv it moar dan anythin'.

ur characterisations r good 2, n i think dat it was gud.

well dun.

I think this is very good. You've portrayed Claire extremely well, and I think you've done a good job with Myrnin,too. I can see this happening in the books. I look forward to reading more of your work.

So sad!

Myrnin! Don't kill yourself!

You still have Myrnin down, even though we're not in his head. You've got us to understand his personality perfectly.

"His eyes went wide, and he convulsed for a moment before he came back to reality. He looked at Claire and asked, completely sane, "Why didn't you do it?" He hadn't forgotten he'd been trying to end his own life. Hadn't forgotten how he'd tried to get Claire to do it for him. Because he hadn't been crazy when he'd asked. He'd really wanted her to do it."

:'(

owww this is so sad

aww... i can totally see this happening! rlly good job!

So, i take it this is BEFORE Carpe Corpus. Cuz he gets cured in that one.

hehe.

Wait, this isn't a hehe moment!

Myrnin was so sad in those days. :(

It made me sad to see him sad. He friggin cried the first day his met Claire nd then he asked her to kill him! Friggin, if she killed him, i would have killed HER.

And silver knife, eh?

Gotta love 'em. Silver hurts. Bwah hahaha.

And you have Oliver's number, why?

Hah, you probably asked for it.

Smooth talking a vampire comes naturally, huh? _

really enjoyed this...great story!

Awesomeness!

Love it!

-TL-

awww that got me teary eyed a bit

I can't remember that it said that in Kiss of Death

wut page?

Did I ever mention I am in LUV wit ur writing?

I did?

ok, just making sure

not telling u that would be a sin aganist writing and manners

I believe in telling the truth

and the truth is u ROCK as a writer

D

~*TIff*~

Yo this rocked! It was awsome! You've thrown off like 10 or 11 fanfics already! You're doing Fantastic!

Wow!good story! Is this a one shot or will their be more? Oh well it's a good story! )

You've certainly written this well _ However, I'm not quite sure I believe Myrnin would do this. He's too crazy and caught up with finishing his research to wish his own death while sane. Had there been some underlying plot or cause here—one of his expirements gone horrifyingly wrong, perhaps? Maybe when he cut out part of his brain for Claire to study it messed him up a bit?—I think it would have been a lot more believable. Personally, I always love seeing the crazy, dangerous side of Myrnin; I think that if you bring that out more, it'll make things more interesting!

All in all, great writing, but the plot could use a wee bit of work. :)

~LovableEvil