Sorry too OCC already. I really doubt karin would do that.

Love the story :D ! Some of the characters seemed to OOC but other then that it's good.
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Isn't kun used for boys? o-o

Omg I love this story

what the hell genpachi! its kenpachi with a k

U must do another!

OMG! i am a complete sucker for romance and i really hate momo so this was awesome. ARGH i really wanna know more! xxxxxxx thank you ! :) 3

Dont mean to be rude and correct you but its kenpachi zaraki lol but otherwise good story like it so far!

:D chEersz.!

I've got to say that your plot pulled me in. It was creative and it sounded great!

As I progress in the story there were things that I liked about it and also some that I didn't like.

It's really cute and funny. There's definitely a lot of fluff and it's just filled with drama.

You kept Rangiku in character at least. But I just really need to point out some stuff to you.

This story lacks in description and it seems rushed, leaving the characters and their actions vague and you seem to only expose one side of what the character is going through. Like after Toshiro chases after Karin and she shuts the door on him I remember her screaming, "Why do bad things always happen to me?"

It really made Karin look well.. OOC. She would never cause so much drama over Toshiro kissing Hinamori.. neither would Hinamori.

That fight that broke out between them well, unless you were trying to make them look immature you kind of overdid it. Karin would never release her bankai over something silly like boy drama. I don't know if this is true but if you don't like Hinamori thats fine.

But she would never sabotage Karin that way. Well, what I'm saying is that you overdid it with the boy drama a lot. Toshiro asking Hinamori was really unexplained really. If he likes Karin then why would he ask Momo out? The only explanation was..

"Hmm Momo's been my friend for ages, so I guess it wouldn't hurt to go out with her … maybe. OK! I'll ask her out."

First of all, if she's been his friend for ages why would he want to ruin that friendship by asking her out for no good reason? Hitsugaya is beyond smarter than that! Why would he want to stir up more drama and cause more damage than necessary?

Before you jump straight into the boy drama, think about it thoroughly. There has to be reasoning or you'll just make all the characters look like a bunch of idiots. This kind of stuff takes a lot of thinking and analyzing. Cause and Effect. You've got both but you're missing the logical reasoning.

Would a captain really do that? Would he want to ruin his dignity and reputation over some girl?

Would Momo really go to the extremes of making Toshiro her love? If so, does she even think of that friendship she's risking? You've captured the jealousy she's feeling well. I could understand her emotions very well and feel what she's feeling. As OOC as it is and extreme, her actions portray her jealousy very well.

What bugged me the most about Karin was her releasing her Bankai over something silly.

Anyways, thanks.

You're good at capturing drama in a story.

Just think it over more, and you'll definitely have readers wanting more. I mean..You already have them wanting more, but they'll want to read even more if you add more description.

Keep on Writing and KarinXHitsu4evr!

SEQUEL! DO A SEQUEL, PLEASE!

love the story . . . but this is sort of a suggestion. i don't want to critcize but maybe u can put what happened on the other dares. just giving a suggestion because im curious on what happened to them.

waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhh OMG it was really cliffhanger! Jesus.. I was giggling and shrieking my ass in the bathroom .. i was in class when i decided to check fanfiction and you updated so i had to excuse myself.. LOL.

this was really an amazing story..

i really love it..

love that toshiro propose to karin

please do write some more stories of this couple..

pretty please? LOL..

what a cliffhanger! xDD

you must make a sequel! or else ò_ó

jaja, nah, but please do it! it was great!... short but great!

eeee aww