I agree with almost everything mimic shalle says so I wont add anything except that I like this story and wish there was more! ;)

Okay this is the point where I would bang my head on the wall for not putting you in my subscription list, because of that I totally missed this nice one shot (only one shot? I want to read more ;x;)

For your first time writing in this section (vampires) you did very good. And divine writing style! I really like how you write your stories, it's easy to read and it flows smoothly. I wouldn't normally read anything that points David as the catcher but, hey, since this is you, any story would always be something worth reading, not to mention it would really be such a sweet treat.

I can't say that I really like Rush and David here, since well, as I've said before, David is my pitcher so I see him more as the predator not the prey. I'm totally biased in this sort of thing (sorry) so I won't be making any comments on their chemistry in this story but! I would like to point out that the way you made the characters interact with each other is very believable and fun to read. They don't sound stiff, only natural.

This was a very nice one-shot, I'll be on the look out for more :]

-mimic

Good work, if you want, for the next encounters you can use some of my OCs.