Update, please!

FINISH IT.

Update sssssoon

Are you not updating anymore :'(

This is really cool. I'd love to find out what happens, although I kinda already know ya know 'cause of the show and all. But this is still cool. Please continue!

I think this is a great first fanfic, being your very first try. There are a few mistakes here and there but over all, very good. One of the first mistakes is that Reid never shakes hands, due to his slight autism. As you may see in the shows, he usually gives a polite wave instead. As well, you mentioned collage as the bad expeience of bullies for Reid but generally, collage's have very little bulling due to the fact the students would range from 18 and over, so the level of maturity is much higher. The unfortunate experience would more likely be linked to highschool rather than university, speically since Spencer gave an account of being humilated in highschool in 'Elephant's memory'. Another point would be that I don't think Hotch would have reacted as warmly as in the fanfic, since his personality is stoic and calculating. The first part where you mentioned Hotch seemed to be inspecting Reid is correct and the small, polite smile but I think his face would still be shrew and in thought. His greeting would have been more formal. This is Hotch's first time seeing Spence so he too, is ever so slightly doubhtful, but he'd remain polite and calm. The last piece of what I hope is friendly advice is that remember to put in the 5 sense's. Touch, taste, sound, smell and sight. You've got sight nailed down but I believe the others would be very effective too if used properly. Example 1:Smell: Reid could smell the famlier, warm, bitter scent of Coffee down the corrider, luring him to come closer: [Reid does like his coffee afterall.] Anyway, I feel if you added a few other ways of description, it would make a huge difference. Either way, I hope this helps you with your story! It's quite entertaining.

Interesting! Please Update!

Please write more! The story is getting intense, and I can't wait to Reid more lmao! Update soon!

Please write more! The story is getting intense, and I can't wait to Reid more lmao! Update soon!

This is great!

I did not see that coming. Great twist. Reid getting annoyed about being called a kid is funny. But it makes sense, he wants his colleagues to see him as an adult who worked hard to get there. What's going to happen with Reid and Morgan? I look forward to the next chapter.

Good work with designing this case. Too bad Reid heard Hotch's "whisper" about him. Looks like Reid will just have to show them. Good job with this chapter.

Wow, it's only his first day and drama is already starting. If only he knew Morgan just liked to tease his friends. Good job with having JJ stand up for Reid and then Reid's reaction to feeling more like a kid because someone else is fighting his battles.

The only thing I don't like is the way Reid handled the situation. Since he's new and given his history with bullies I don't think he would openly confront Morgan like that. Maybe if Morgan keeps it up for a while, but right now Reid is coming off as a jerk rather than the nervous, meek way he would behave in that situation based on his character in the first season.

This is a pretty good chapter.

Good work with the first chapter. You've done well to get inside Reid's head and show the nervousness he's feeling about meeting a new group of people and finding his place on the team. I like the detail you include on why he always carries the messenger bag with him.

The interactions with Gideon are nicely done. Gideon has done well to make Reid feel welcome and to try and ease some of the nerves. The bit about making Hotch smile is great.

My only suggestion is that since you are telling this through Reid's perspective is that you might want to include more Reidisms. For instance you may want to throw in some more statistics when the time calls for it, maybe even a fact or two that somehow relates to something someone says. He doesn't have to say it out loud, but he would at least think it.

Good work with this chapter.

Oh no! Don't give up! Please please continue! I love this story so far! PLEASE! If you do decide to continue I think you should maybe have Reid get injured adn then Morgan and Reid like bond adn become better friends... I don't know, I just wish you would continue!