I loved it :) this was a really good one-shot :D great job 0

A for:

-an awesome plot,

-a great story,

-good grammer, and

-no errors as far as i can tell.

Love this story!

I love all your stories!

Write more and post them up! Everyone loves them!

I'd give you an S like in the sonic games if you get perfect.

S if that's even possible

great story!heeheeheeheehee

Aww, this made me smile (: It was marvelous.!

Wow this is amazing, the discriptiveness in this peice made me feel like I was really there.

What more was the fact that you portrayed the characters not only as most other people would do on fanfiction but you even added a orginalness to their personalities as well. Overall I would give this story an A !

I'd give it an A.

I got confused in some parts :P

I wanted death...

And the kiss thing was predictable, but everyone is guilty of that, even me even though I hate admitting it.

I would've liked it one million times more if she did hit the rocks and THEN Vaughn was all like that 'cause it's not as predictable, and I think that serious injury brings out that kind of stuff.

It was obvious what was going to happen when Vaughn says he "Wanted to talk about stuff." tell tale sign.

I liked it :)

Hmm. The story was good in terms originality, but as a whole it came across like "this happened, then this happened". Vaughn could have used more speaking lines so we get the idea of what he is like (given that he is seemingly friends with Chelsea, a reader isn't really ever shown how they interact with one another) The kiss at the end was okay, but a little rushed considering Chelsea almost died moments earlier. For a grade, I'd say a B. Good story!

A x infinite from me!

Very descriptive and interesting, and I love Vaughn's antisocial personality. I loved all the adjectives you used. You rock at writing!

Luv PSBH Xox xoX

A

The ending was kinda cut off. But ither than that good story just not a great ending but no worries i have the same problem. I'd give you a B.

Loved it! You should get an A! Youve given me inspiration for my eniglish classes. Not using your idea but the characters. Awesome story. Keep writing. :)

AW! I like it. :) Vaughn's personality really shows, and all of your descriptions are amazing.

Anyway, nice story. I would grade it, but I don't know what I'm supposed to be grading it on, so...

Over all, an A. :D If there's something specific I need to grade it on, let me know.

you should have gotten a SUPER DUPER AMAZING! ( SDA )

I thought this was well written and interesting!

Shame your teacher never graded it, it was lovely to read. :)

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Amazing. I like the detail. It isn't too much or too little.

You should get an A! :D