...Nuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu T.T *hugs Apollo* how could you? This is the second story I've read with Apollo committing/seriously thinking/almost committing suicide, whyyyyyyyyyyy T.T

ow my poor heart

That... is morbid and awesome 8I Also, angst. It hurts so gooood...

wow.. that is quite..

but Justice is never flawless ):

Eventought i don't really love dead main characters, i think no one understood him here..

and i like this writing style by the way )

Ps: it's not Fräu, it's Frau (yes, german is quite difficult)

If you ask why I know that.. well.. i speak German w

a bit... iffy. That sounds weird. I just mean that angst is hard to write, and yours is off. You have the emotions there, but you don't describe them enough. I'd start off simple. Fluff is great :). I can't get enough of it! Your one about fanfiction was much better - chuckles are good.

Word of warning: You seem reasonably new to the buisiness (then again, I may be wrong) and killing off a main character is something the lots of most experienced writers wouldn't dare to do!

Thanks for the translations at the bottom. The characteration was good and it was nice to read.

Not bad for a first story. Other than a few grammar issues, not bad at all. Poor Klavier - doesn't he have enough demons already? Anyways, I think you captured the nature of Apollo and Klavier's relationship quite well - mutual respect, yet with clear differences. I thought Klavier's characterization was especially good considering all the torture that game puts him through. Obviously, Apollo was a little over the edge, but that was the point of the story.

Anyways, keep writing. You've got good ideas, and you should keep it up!

~Kat~