Great fanfiction and chapter. :)

AWESOME. man, I hate that apple so much! I hated playing the game with it and i hated what it made Desmond do! LOL I am so going to have my main OC bash the crap out of it in my fic; just saying is all, hee! yeah, the apple is evil, EVIL I tell you!

but yeah, enough of my soapbox; this was great! I absolutely love the language you used; very poignant. nice job!

You've done a fantastic job of capturing emotion here, its what I'd imagine was probably going through his mind at the time. You're descriptions are also amazing.

I really didn't like the ending and its been really bugging me, but I guess we have to wait :)

Great job anyway :D

*sobs*

i wrote a story, too, right after i finished the game. my story reminds me of yours, except i took a more sorrowful approach.

this is a beautiful, beautiful piece of work. it perfectly captures the way Desmond must have been feeling as he watched himself...you know.

(honestly, i almost didn't finish the game once i saw what was coming. i made myself do it, though, because i needed to know.)

the descriptions are exquisite, the imagery spectacular...it's a fitting farewell to her.

Requiescat in pace, Lucy.

;_; *sniff... I hate the way Brotherhood ended... . I was freaking out too when it happened. Me and my friend think its possible that her death may lead up to being something really important, and that maybe she's not dead yet... false hope?

But your writing is fantastic. You grasped so much emotion and thought into what was only a few moments in the game! great job really~!

OMG in the end iwas like"wtf? O_O...T-T" it was really sad :(,anyway i liked your writting :D

I was so annoyed by this ending. I'm still thinking about it now. Desmond was my favorite character and I loved Lucy especially since her voice actor was Kristen Bell. I think you should continue the story post-brotherhood and try to create a story to explain all of this. I think Lucy will still be alive in AC 3 though. The guy before me pretty much said all of my questions about this. I'm also kind of confused on whether the "gods" are actually good or bad. They're mad at the humans so I don't really understand their purpose of saving the world.

Dude! I too was having major head twisters with that ending. Many people are trying to interpret, to decode that ending and what it meant. Is Desmond getting a new love interest? A descendant of Eve?

Is Lucy really really a Templar Spy and could she be this Eve. Some many theories.

Can I ask something, a little request. How about write a one-shot where Desmond saves Lucy from dying and they declare their love for one another.

But how can DESMOND have a kid with this Eve, the whole 9 month ordeal and wait for the kid to grow up. I don't understand either.

Great story, by the way.