Good job, I’m waiting for that sequel

the only issue I have with this prologue/ chapter 1 is that you wrote it/them in present tense. Stories are normally written in past tense and that's to me a better way because it reads better and flows more connectedly. Not a big deal though just something I thought I'd point out

I loved it! This is going to sound really weird, but I love stalking stories. Anyway, great job! :)

Hi! Just wanted to tell you that I enjoyed the story very much! I like the concept and the plot but I have to say that you rush the story quite a bit. I don't think I have to mention the grammar mistakes, not that they bother me very much, but you might want invest more time on the emotional part.

Also, there wasn't a lot of background aka base to the story, It was considerably bland even though the general idea was great.

Hope you don't find my observations offencive, I only want you to take my examination as a teaching tool from your readers point of veiw.

- Michael

thank you for writing this. i loved it!

This really just sucked me in right from the start. I hope you aren't too cruel to the boy wonder, he's too cute to get hurt. :P I shall go and read on, you've intrigued me. :)

ME GUSTA :D

I just found the story today and I loved all of it, and I don't think the last chapter is a bad ending :).

That was a great story. I really enjoyed it a lot.

:O I love the action and love in this story (: I really hope that one day you write a sequel :)

What a shame that those chapters were lost. I really like this series

sorry to hear about the last chapter, thanks for a great story though :)

i find it amusing that this is your form of stress relief; writing a story that will presumably contain adrenaline and violence. :)

usually i like stories where relationships build instead of having already being there, but i'm very interested in this one thus far. i have a feeling i'll be enjoying your work. _

Watch supernatural, you'll die it's so good.

Great ending...(: