Confusing... names, please

Much better :) amazing you should keep writing

awesome...I love the way the names are left out til the end. Great Work!

Arvendell, are you really lazy back when you were writing this? I mean, seriously. All that I could say after reading this was... "panalo 'to".

Yum, this story was absolutely delicious.

Playing coy with who was who was an entertaining puzzle on my first read, although it did lead to a spot of confusion when they got talkative. Upon reading it a second time, I think I understand which woman is speaking which lines.

The sensations are artfully described and full, allowing me a perfect movie in my mind's eye where everything was real and sensual.

AblatedCrayon

Long time no see around here.

Don’t’ worry about getting lazy about writing, because I’m getting lazy (and busy) for reading. I miss the good times when I could take my sweet time and devour story after story until fulfillment, but now my damn work is burning me down. Anyway, nice to know you still keep your touch with this couple, one of my favorite behind Nanoha and Fate.

About this story, you’re right, it wasn’t necessary to create a setting for their lovemaking, we need to take for granted that part already (all the stories you wrote can be the background). I was satisfied to know it wasn’t necessary to say names until the very end, because the personalities and thoughts of each one take the lead. That’s Sachiko and Yumi for you.

Now I’ll take a look to “Nigh After”. Read you.

Nice one-shot. Liked how Sachiko confused Yumi many times while they were together.

I really enjoyed this story and would love to read the sequel! )

i gotta say ive been reading your stories, and your deff. my favorite my MSGM writer,but sence i didnt have an account i never revied. but i specificaly signed up to tell that i love all your work and not to get discuraged about the writes block, it will come to you when it comes to you. cant wait to read the sequel to this!

It's completely new, but nice. ) The sequel sounds good, as well. ;) Don't get tired of writing. You're really awesome, you know. _

Wonderfull Christmas gift, so full of passion and desire. And a sequel sounds great to me. :D

Ill pray untill your writing muse comes back or lazyness decrease... what comes first. LOL

Thank you!

hey

long time ... i guess at this times everybody is really busy and dont have the time of the world to do as they wish, this was differente yeah.. not bad but i guess i prefer your previous style even when you dont really explain how they commit into a relationship, however i still like and wish the pasion for writting keeps alive in you

saludos

Hi-For some weird reason everytime I wonder myself if you have update some new and awesome story my dream come true lol. I really like about this one shot you didn't mention who was who until the end. I was thinking by their actions and talking who was on the top and who was under lol.I was some what surprise by the answer.

I really hope you get your writing muse back!...because as I said to you in other reviews you are the only author that really made me believe in this couple.

PD:I will love to see you update that sequel ;)

Take Care!

I really enjoyed how this was from Sachiko's perspective, I had originally guessed Yumi, before it became apparent who it really was. I think you put in just enough physical vs. emotional detail, to still impact the reader, tell your story with artistic freedom, and still kept it tasteful. What a lovely piece of erotica, which is a hard genre to write I know. thank you again!

this was amazing.. heheh.. hope you continue writing more fics...