Pretty good but the two girls laughing aimlessly was pretty pointless. Since a naked man in the river might be a funny sight but at some point it gets disgusting and creepy. Plus something like that shouldn't have ended with a line already said once. Instead it should have been sealed with a kiss

If you remember during the transaction within the game from the U.S. John told Irish that he couldn't swim, and Irish said the same, then they cut the rope and let the raft float down the river.

Overall I thought it was humorous and I enjoyed reading it besides that one fact inside my head nagging at me, I'd like to read more.

I... Like it.

I died at "I fell in love with my right hand first"

Cracks about his what, now?

Your characterization in this piece is brilliant. You really capture the "flavor" of Abigail and John, and your dialogue could have easily been included in the game. I was really impressed by your writing, but your incorrect punctuation use in dialogue is distracting. Most people do not really want to hear constructive criticism, but if you would like help figuring out how to punctuate dialogue, feel free to ask me. I really hope to see you continue to write for this fandom!

SO. CUTE. :]

"I feel in love with my right hand first" made me laugh so hard, I loved this it was quite funny.

John can swim? Well aside from that little tidbit, cute story.

Agh! That was so cute. Very well written and very well into character. I absolutely loved it. Thank you for sharing!

Heh, funny and nice. Touching as well. Great job!

From, Comment person

P.S. Shame we couldn't see more of John and Abigail's relationship in the game. Guess this makes up for it! Again, great job.

I loved the dynamic between John and Abigail in canon, and it's a shame we didn't see much. Lucky we've got you to fill us in on the life and times of the Marstons. Very in character, time appropriate fic here - keep it up.

I know that i haven't taken the time to play this super awesome video game but i did watch my mom play it after i got home from school but i saw the archive thing, clicked it, and found this and read it, if i had to put a one-word label on it it'd be: awesomesauce

Nice story but use more insults to make it funnier in result keep it up man