brilliant story!

:D

ummmmm O.o if ya bored an you want to write a quick fan fic, you might a well make it a little more believable. it was pretty normal up until Ariadne was just like "arthur, kiss me" totally out of nowhere. it was stil fun to read, though!

Aww, this was cute.

I love this~ Very cute. You're working on a book? Congrats. When is it coming out in stores? Because I CAN'T wait to read more of your work. :D

Gotta say, I enjoyed this very much. The only thing that I have a problem with (As if you need to take my suggestions! Faugh!) is at the end when He just goes 'Wanna go out?" It sticks out like a sore thumb with the rest of the story.

Does that make any sense or am I just rambling? Eh, other than that one line, this made me smile.