'Breathes' is not a word

I think you might mean, 'breaths', as in

"Her hyperventilating had ceased and her exposed chest was rising and falling in deep, slightly uneven breaths"

Although it seems like a oneshot...

Please, please, please do continue.

Please.

I loved this. All the stories you write, are so possible and in character. Like any of this is possible. I love it. I'm so happy with this story. I wouldn't change a thing. Great work. I know I'll see plenty of drool worthy stories from you in the future. Can't wait! :)

Awesome! I like this one better than the first version.

Ooooh yes. I've been waiting for this ever since I saw Tron! I really enjoyed your imagery and characterizations, in particular. Quorra was excellently written. I could picture her responding exactly the way she did in your story. But I especially felt like you captured CLU really well-after all, he isn't supposed to be evil-but he still has that edge to him-like not being afraid to laugh at Quorra a little derogatorily while she's so vulnerable. Well done!

Great story, characterizations were stretched but not snapped, well done. Your ending made me wish it wasn't a oneshot-seems like you opened up a great can of worms that could go just about anywhere. Will you reconsider?

Again, nice work.

I loved this story. I don't feel like CLU was as out of character as you would think. I felt like you explored the vulnerability to his personality. I've always felt that CLU was a complex character and that his intentions were never pure evil.

Whoa! Now that was a suprise! I loved it, very lustful and had quite a sweet ending. Kudos!

omg, wow *melts* I never thought CLU/Quorra could be done in this manner, but you just proved me wrong. It was so hot and well done yet amazingly in character.

I honestly LOVE your work, keep it up!