Reviews for Sleeping Sand, Silent Cloud |
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RisingMist chapter 1 . 12/29/2011 Nice little one shot. I loved it. You should really change the "awoken" thing to, "she looked more awake." It sounds wrong, as it is now. Thanks for sharing. |
The King of Bronze and Copper chapter 1 . 8/11/2011 Wow! Great story, as a one-shot artist, I really envy your work! I hope that you keep writing,and I hope I can get as good as this! Write more! |
Lowbacca's Roar chapter 1 . 7/31/2011 Awesome. So cute! |
hinatasgreatestfan chapter 1 . 7/31/2011 That was very good, if a bit short. I like. |
kagomecathanyo chapter 1 . 4/4/2011 SOOOO KAWAII!...it's feels weird for me saying this but...shoutout plz |
YumeKioko chapter 1 . 1/25/2011 I think it could have used more...fluff? Ya fluff the basis of a story is exposition, intiating event, rising action, CLIMAX, falling action, and resolution right? But your kind of lacking in some of those departments. I think what I am trying to say is slow down and add some details, some imagery, paint the picture in the readers eyes. Other than that okay job for your first time!:) Keep on writing! |