This has a second chapter potential, well written.

This is a very sweet look into "a day in the life of" their experience in Gran Pulse prior to Eden.

This is a wonderful piece. Your writing is fluid, your characters are captured and portrayed perfectly. You can definitely sense Fang's admiration, if not more, for Lightning.

Very nice! Keep up the great writing. :)

Well captured emotions, I think you got the essence and spirit of Lightning's captivating beauty during a fight. I like this! :)

This was beautifully written—very nice ending haha. I like how Lightning actually called the paradigm; a nice addition of gameplay to the fic. Good job!

Wonderful.