great story. thank you for sharing

Very nice. Loved it

Wow loved this chapter, loved how McGee didn't care he was hurt and shot the computers to save the day. McGee is my favorite.

Loved this up to the point where everyone was okay with Tim playing laser tag the day he is released from the hospital from a bleeding lung and torn spleen. If Maxine wanted to date Tim so bad she should have suggested bringing in dinner and a movie and then tucking him into bed, don't wear him out so he has a relapse. Otherwise, I really enjoyed it.

Glad to have Tim doing some "saving the day" stuff since he doesn't get out much on the show. Also thanks for pulling Maxine in to the story, I really liked her on the show & was hoping she'd stick around. Good story, thanks!

I'm totally loving this story! Nothing really exciting ever happens to Tim on the show and this story is probably one of the best Tim stories I have read!

Update soon!

I like it, It was ok