Fluffy goodness. Thanks

HAHAHA! XD

:)

It was great in the beginning but I think the kiss was a bit rushed. But then again I don't really like sap, so overall good job.

Ahahaha! xD I laughed my ass off on the ending of this story xD Great one! Keep the good work ;D

I wonder what would happen if the rumor was to be leaked to the soul society. especially byakuya's reaction *hint hint, wink wink*

Turn this into a lemon.

Make this a multi-chapter! On the other hand this was really good for a one-shot.

Haha, nice one! But I hope this story could be a liiitle longer... you know what I mean, right? *perverted mind* never mind, just ignore it. Overall, I like this one-shot. Keep writing!

Hey Josh, welcome to world of writing fanfics! I know it's a lot harder than you think to write a good fic (especially once you've read some brilliant ones - have you read Agreed to Innocence by Theresa Crane - I notice you have her as one as your favourite authors), and you've done a good job with your first one!

I really enjoyed this piece, it was well written. The plot was genius!

One thing I would like to add (being a massive IchiRuki fan) is that you appeared to rush the ending. I realise this is a one-shot, but it could easily be developed into a fully fledged multi-chap story - you could go more into detail about the part where Keigo finds out about them living together, playing up the scene where Orihime rages at Rukia, and the ending - well you could make a whole chapter on that :P (us IchiRuki fangirls won't mind - honest!) - it doesn't have to be lemon, but they could discuss Ichigo's mum a bit and then have them kiss and walk home to continue their activities. I'd be happy to help if you wanted to do this :)

I wish I'd thought of this plot!

I look forward to seeing you write more!

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Hello, Josh, the Prototype! This was well-written and very fun. I hope you do continue with the story; it'd be great to see whether or not Orihime gets over her crush or not. Thank you!