I was just looking for some Dumbledore bashing, but this got out of hand, fast.

Typical unbelievable crazy story

nice

I doubt you'll ever respond to this, but I will say it anyway. I like this fic for the most part however there are 2 things I just don't like about this fic and that is how Tonks is being portrayed and while she hasn't showed up yet Fleur as well.

I really wish it's revealed later they weren't doing this of their own free will, but I have my doubts

Me and Remus
Me, Remus and the Black family
Why are so many proud of horrible grammar?
Remus and I-doesn't that just sound better?
Remus, the Black family, and I-it really is that easy to make characters sound somewhat educated and intelligent.
Take out other names, and the sentence tells you if I or me is correct. It is so easy

" Good. Initiate (order 66) ". is that a star wars reference aaaa

Sorry not what I'm looking for I expected some smut to compensate your lousy writing but NO theirs nothing. That's not to say your story is bad you move at a tad too fast pace your idea for the story is actually pretty good.

So peace and and writing...

Okay.. now I understand. You’re either under twelve years old or you’re just plain stupid. This is horribly written.

Huh? How is Tonks being in the Will proof of her being involved, but the twins being in it isn’t? Hell, it didn’t even specify a number for her, it just said she got what Remus would’ve gotten but the problem was that all it said about Remus was that he got nothing while the twins got five million galleons. For that matter, Sirius himself made the Will under some kind of influence, why are they all so certain none of the others who ‘betrayed’ them weren’t as well? Sirius said they had to find out if Tonks was on their side or not, meaning while he knew a lot he didn’t know about that.

This is a great plot. although the delivery seems rushed a times, the whole sequence is original.
thanks for sharing.

Braindead retard

Retard

Lmfao get fucked you stupid fucking retard.

"Due to the nature of the withdrawals we can only retrieve 40%"

Fucking retard. That's not how that shit works, and in a world like that, even less so. Fucking stupid bitch. Fuck you. Delete this fucking garbage off the internet, and then never write here again.

Well this was an excellent story. Quite interestingly played out with plenty fun to it. Especially the bit with Tom, that was a unique take on things. Though you never quite explained how life debts worked in this story. Cannon wise it seems like there is a bit more to it than just saving someone's life. It looks like it was more of a risking your life or sacrificing something to save someone else from apparent life threatening peril when it would not really be expected of you. At least that is how it appears to work out. Of course I imagine that the Dumbledore of this story would, could, and probably did, compel people into thinking that other things.

The only thing that is a little off is Harry's reaction to Ron and Hermione's betrayal. Considering the lengths, levels, and methods Dumbledore was known for using to control people it just seems odd that Harry didn't do try to see what was up with that. Particularly when Dumbledore literally tortured Hermione, by withholding proper medical care, on top of everything else just to get her to betray him in the first place. So it seems both weird and unjustified especially since he spent so much time thinking about everything else. In any case it was still a fun read and a delightful story.

this story was awsome, i loved th way you wrote and the real grit infused int the story.

The fact that not everyone got their happy ending and the fact that not every character survived gave it a real feel.

Your one hell of writer in my opinion