this is so good!

Sorry that it took me so long to review this for you. You did review something of mine but my laptop has been down for so long. I rarely get online.

This is really well written. I read on your profile that you're 15? This is impressive for someone that age. If I hadn't known better, I would have said that you were at least 20.

Anyway, I like all of the details that you put into the work. You don't leave the readers thinking much in terms of what environment they're in or what they're wearing. You're very clear in setting that kind of background information up right away!

I would be wary of the run-on sentences in the first paragraph though. That's really my only criticism.

I read "The Secret", too. Very good book and I firmly believe in what it has to say, too.

Anyway, great one shot!

This is nice, a good way to fuel someone into writing more. 9/10 on this story

it's not that horrible if you think.

it's great actually.

just take it easy on you Silver Thread. there is no reason to rush it. we'll wait, patiently...

Great story. BUT WHAT? D: ONE MY FAV STORY OS ON HIATUSSSSSS? :((( well I hope you update it soon _

this is beautiful, never say that your work is horrible or something like that, you write very well, too well.

and I agree Lelouch like to lie, but for good things

nice story btw~