Adorable!

You spelt Meduella wrong .

That was so Sweet!

omg plleasssee mke up a sky high 2 for amilia and lash

awesome.

This, was a great story:D I love the ending! I always liked Lash, I enjoy the fact that you gave him a reason for being part of the plan and made him good:D

I love your story ! it was sooo amazing thank you for writing

i love this story! :)

I love lash it's a shame he doesn't have many supporters.I wish he wasn't a bad guy.

loved it!

what a punch! .

What happened? noe one will know unless you update!

Hey, great story! This is very similar to the stories I write, and therefore I really like it. However, because I know a bit about this story type, I’d like to give you some of the same advice I’ve received, so that you can improve as a writer.:)

It was a little hard for me to get into your character because—and I know you will absolutely hate me saying this—she has Mary Sue tendancies. I’d like to recommend a website on Mary Sues that I found very helpful: . . Here's some of the things I found frustrating that I'm sure you could improve with a little editing:

-Amelia is so comfortable with the main characters (the Strongholds), even though there is no logical reason for them to get along. Why are they so close?

-She explains what she wears (and the same hair and makeup routine) *every single day*. It was fine once so we could visualize her style, but itbecomes very redundant and repetative after a while.

-Keep her powers to just controlling darkness. It is a very cool power, and you don't need to mention anything about mind control...it just seems kind of random. And how does she know she can suffocate people with darkness if she's never done it? I might also suggest not jsut spelling out her powers right off the bat-integrate this realization in with the rest of your writing.

I absolutely love the way you developed Lash's character and his relationship with Amelia. Just be wary that he doesn't fall for her *too* quickly. You don't have to do the whole "they hate each other then they fall in love" thing, but make it clear *why* he falls for her.

CHAPTER 8 MADE ME SO EFFING HAPPY. Once I read that, I fell head over heels for your story.

And, finally, I LOVE Dylan and Lara. They are my fave characters fore sure. :)

Please finish this story soon! I want to know how it ends!

lol epic!

I can't wait for the next chapter! I'm loving this :D

LOL, Toxic! D D I laughed when they argued, then kissed. ) Post more soon, please!