Sad to say its been 7 years since this story was posted. It deserves to be continued.

This deserves to be continued.

shame you dropped this

This is an Idea too awesome to stop here

Kotomine being summoned as Louise's familiar? This I got to read! Please update soon!

Admittedly, I haven't gone through HF yet myself - got sidetracked somewhere in the middle of UBW - but overall I don't think your Kirei is too far off the mark.

Very Origanal
Using Kotomine he will Manipulate Everyone in Halkeginia he might even be like Double Agent
Please Uptade this Story is Incredible How you made things into a more Dark Fantasy
I recomend you to read
Berserk
Claymore
Akame ga Kiru
Jackals
The Monk(Novel)
This stories have the atmosphere of that halkeginia

Pretty good start you seem to have characterized Kotomine well enough in this chapter though. hoping for updates.

nice start.

it would be cool if you updated the story.

VERY interesting start. I can't wait for the next chapter.

Well you got him right on this one. A thing to remmember is that Kotomine does not directly lie. He only lies by ommission. Also, he always sounds bored or at best disinterested. The only ones who were ever able to get an emotional responce out of him where Kiritsugu and Shirou in HF route.

Hope you can get back to this, its a very interesting premise.

Very promising with a merciless character as Kotomine. I really will love to see his actions in Zero no Tsukaima universe.

Hmm...not bad. Not bad at all. Your writing is certainly no slouch, though you seem to suffer from the one-line syndrome as I do (stupid formatting, making it look like we write less than we really do . ).

I'd disagree with your last reviewer, at least partially. Yes, Kirei is empty, and because of that he engages in activities he consciously knows are evil because he enjoys them. I believe it's hinted somewhere that he's tried to be normal but got none of the satisfaction, so he's stuck in psycho-troll mode forever. .

Kirei becoming Louise' familiar? I am suddenly reminded of Hill of Swords and Shirou's influence on his Master. This could either end in laughter or tears...possibly of laughter. :P

Looking forward to see what you do with this. And if you need a beta, I might be able to help.

I'd like to see where this story goes, considering you completely gave the ZnT world a new look. Also, my only problem is that I wouldn't called Kotomine "evil," he's more empty. Other than that I didn't really find a problem.

Hhmm, good choice actually, as he taught Rin, and look how she turned out. I would be willing to beta read for you, as I am fairly well read, and thus have a rather easy time pointing out any sentence flow or grammatical errors.

However, I usually send back a bit of extra material at the end that I think would be helpful, usually some extra details to juice up the story. If this is alright, then send me a private message as letting me know, k? Nicely done, hope I can help with something that looks like such a unique idea(Honestly, Kirei, such a novel idea that it brings a chuckle forth).