This was very sweet. It kind of made me want to cry to cry a little. Very nice job. :)

ohh this is so achey but i love the premise. i can completely understand memphisto's unease by all that shiro has just taken on and i'm forever intrigued by memphisto shiro's relationship. hope you write more of them!

can i just say that this fanfic made me BAWWW so hard.

i had to - ohmygod. lol. yeah, you're gonna have to deal with a spazzy review. it was just .. so sad. ; I MEAN, SO TOUCHING, TOO. my favourite part was:

"How? How can you smile about this?" The moon was revealed once more, casting light onto the other's aging features. Shiro pushed up his rimmed glasses, the beads glinting in the light.

With a small pause, he responded, "I've been blessed with two sons. Who wouldn't smile?"

that part. so much. my heart just melted everywhere and now i'm a complete mess. also, the end was aksdjhaskdja-worthy.

"Yes, but who will protect you?"

ugh. just. this. so. much. words cannot express how much i love this fic. i was actually intending to write you one of my long, special reviews. the ones i give to really good fics/authors, but it's so late at night that my brain has been turned to mush. and this fic didn't help either - not that it's a bad thing. i'm actually quite glad your fic made me melt.

BEST THING EVER.

anyway. ... love this fic. love you for writing it. just.. ugh. my heart. it died. ILU. I NEED THIS FIC. /prints it out to read in bed.)

Wonderful! I love your formal writing style in this story, and your characterization was great. I would love to see more Shiro/Mephisto fics from you.

-UndineAlice

Thank you so much, Christina! I always enjoy any type of feedback. You've calmed many of my worries that I wasn't playing the characters accurately. xD

Hello! I just read your story, and although I'm not that good at writing critique, I wanted to encourage you and tell you that your story is really, really well written; I like that fact that you use certain terms and syntax construction that give the writing a more formal style " could take no more" instead of " couldn't take it any more" for ex.

Also, you nailed down the characters' personalities ! Keep up the good work!