No, just no. Hiyori is far too powerful for this chapter to make any sense. By trying this hard to stick to how events happened in the manga you made your story unbelievable.

I am not gonna be mad at you or anything but you really downplayed Zaraki's whole character. His entire shtick as that as he gets closer and closer to death he keeps releasing more and more power while semi-healing himself as long as he is close to death. I can see it I guess but you kind of just made him quite honestly feel like a weakling, but whatever.

This is where I take my leave. The english was hard to support but I live with it, daily, so I can do with bad english. Now, filler BS just make this worse. Urahara is as bad as you can get character wise. Is like Dumb-as-door, the guy knows too much, shares nothing and go apologizing after something bad that, could totally not happen, happen. Ichigo was a stupid as a tree, got thrown in the storm, took all damage, got a huge-ass enemy with a poweful artifact that can't be destroyed and when the culprit of all this apologized... "Nah, Ok nothing too bad happened", yeah nothing at all, just opened the barrel to let the guy toy him all time he want. Urahara is as bad as some villains, Kubo just like to make him do timely appearances to make him less evil.

This chapter was ridiculous, too much BS in a chapter. I liked zaraki death, he's a dumbass weak overestimated brat. Just got some tough flesh and bloodlust and act all mighty. He should stay dead. Is tiring to see people have to beat sense over and over to him see his sword more than some scrap iron.
That note was lame too.

Now with hiyori there we have the receipt to have the same outcome as Canon ever with ichigo slight stronger

Yay, changes... Now see if the changes will keep or things would change jus along to keep the story Canon, I fear the fights would just be as harder, since as visored he won't need even the whole pressure for make a bankai.

Still waiting for a change

12 Canon chapters, will it ever diverge? I'M never against using Canon material but go with it by word with no improvement from the characters is sad, Urahara is an ass Canon and here he knows everything treat everyone as baby and tells nothing until last second or when kubo tell him so. But hiyori here is as good as not being here. Is she on vacation or something? Not even speaking to him about the swords in the Grand fisher incident. Follow Canon without changes is boring. Is sad when you know that even if you cut her out of your story nothing would change just the comic relief.

quite the ride, yes i read the whole thing. hiyori x ichigo all the way. great story telling albeit with a few spelling mistakes but nothing that would make even a single sentence incomprehensible. eagerly await your sequel

I like this story so far

It was a fun story to read! Thanks a bunch!

This just got 2x better with the inclusion of soifon.

Great story I really liked it I enjoyed the plot and the choices you made for the pairings a pity what happened to some of the characters but I guess things happen. I liked how powerful IchIgo became and how different the plot was from the animals and Manga all in all a good job.

Whyd you write off soi fon

You know Misaki was a quincy shes not related to the shiba clan. Isshin is kukku uncle. I get you change some thing but at least do it right. Especially since old man zangetsu is ywach