- Well, I gotta say after reading this one, that you know how to make it interesting enough to be almost adictive.
- I didn't expect the spìn you took with Masako's character. I gotta confess, I thought she drove into a train for a moment.
- One thing it could be improved in my opinion, is that the fates of Mutsumi, Naru, Sara and Hina could be explored further. Well, that and I would've liked to see Kagura's character and motivations explored further. And I know I'm repeating myself. Just a personal opinion.

This is truly an awesome Love Hina fanfic and a true classic!

I really liked how the girls got their comeuppance (like Naru) or had redeemed themselves. But really I was hoping that Sarah would get the message but sadly she seems to have learned too much from Naru's extremely bad example!

Speaking of Naru looks she burned all her bridges not just with Granny Hina but with her family as well. I don't blame Naru's family for wanting nothing to do with her, here they were willing to give her another chance and Naru responded with such spitefulness it made me sick! But at least Naru grew up enough to realise that practically that happened including her expulsion, was her fault!

You know something I liked Motoko better in cannon then I did in the manga, because she actually got her act together and became a better person to which Naru chose not to mature at all! Also I'm glad Motoko did mature in this fanfic.

Speaking of Naru just when I thought she couldn't get to a new low she does with the way she treats her family, people who care about her and the bridges with her cruel and wantonly spiteful words! Words cannot possibly describe my disgust at this but then again that was how Naru treated her family in cannon!

Well this gets better and Su is really in trouble and I doubt anyone even her family can get her out of it! Particularly as it has hit the world news! I really felt sorry for Lamba the calls he had on the hotline were not pleasant and were probably demands for an explanation, to which Lamba could not really provide.

Also with Mutsumi I find it appalling that she keeps refusing to listen to reason and just keeps trying to interfere in Keitaro's life when she doesn't have the right to. Who the hell is she to say that Keitaro is making a mistake?!

Also Sarah getting in trouble at school well I was surprised that Sarah was not in school earlier, but either way its not surprising that Sarah would behave like a brat and Seta never ever disciplined her. But at least Seta is showing some brains and some sense in this fic.

Also Naru when subjected to the real world acts like an even bigger spoiled brat then Sarah and Hikaru was well justified in calling her out the way she did! Also hitting that guy why didn't Naru expect it would get her into trouble?

I was incredulous at Mutsumi, I mean honestly once again ignoring Naru's wrongs and just making up weak excuses. Also Mutsumi didn't even try to see what Keitaro's problems might be which is not the act of the good friend because if she actually pulled her head out of her ass she would know about what Keitaro's issues REALLY are!

Also interesting in Keitaro's past with his cousin Yoshinari but then again Keitaro never showed a mature attitude to anyone who genuinely tried to help him or set him straight. Whenever anyone tried to do that for him he just shuts them out and acts like a child!

Also I'm glad that in this that Haruka does not marry Seta, I never felt she had any real feelings for him anymore and just wanted to move on with her life but near the end no one would let her and she didn't tell them to buzz off like she should have! Seta was just living in the past as it seemed a message of the manga and anime that its okay to live in the past instead of looking to the future!

Also you are right about Kaolla Su she hardly ever showed concern for anyone's well being and showed no consideration for anyone except herself! I was incredulous that in this fic she sinks to a new low that brainwashing Keitaro into a slave and a puppet will make him happy! It just outlines her selfishness.

Furthermore about Hina I never felt her attitude was much in any genuine care for her family or even her grandchildren. Hina did not seem at all concerned about the abuse and refused to even listen to Kanako who outlined legitimate concerns and what damaged my respect further for Keitaro was he joined in!

This is again great so far! It was a shame in chapter 12 that Keitaro had to turn Shinobu down because he knew what would happen and then out of nowhere the other girls come. Naru and Motoko making their stupid accusations but at least Shinobu is standing up for herself and Naru and Motoko apparently don't like it particularly that incident in chapter 13 where Motoko talks about being civil and considerate but never is to Shinobu!

Shinobu at least realised how the other girls especially Naru and Motoko don't give a damn about her feelings and then Naru tries to attack her!? I mean how despicable can you get! I'm glad Haruka intervened when she did and the things she said to the girls are absolutely true!

Also at Tokyo University, Naru was hardly being reasonable she was just making herself into the victim when she wasn't and had the nerve to accuse Keitaro of being selfish!? If Naru wants to talk about selfish what about her actions in both the cannons of the manga and anime. Also if Naru wants to talk about selfish what about her refusing to let Keitaro and Kanako work things out!? I can go on and on.

Again Naru is too arrogant, selfish and pathetic to see her own wrongs, it is one of the reasons I hated her so much in cannon because she never ever grew up! Even when Seta tries to reason with her she responds how I expected her to respond with a lot of crap and lame excuses! Then says he doesn't understand and storms off like a spoiled child.

I mean honestly what does Naru take Keiaro for? A Paedophile!? Its so pathetic and idiotic most of the conclusions that Naru and Motoko jump to!

Well at least Seta realised that Sarah being at Hinata Inn isn't all that good for her at least for all her faults Haruka has more sense in her brain then Naru has.

I was incredulous again at the nerve of Naru I hated how bossy she was and how Keitaro never asserted his position of authority as landlord/manager of Hinata Inn. Also I liked how Keitaro dumped Naru which should have happened in cannon.

Also I really hated how Mutsumi was happy to ignore or even excuse the abuse of the other girls especially Naru.

Also some good points about Shinobu too.

Also nice intervention by Seta if he did something like this in cannon it might have made him more likeable.

I've been reading this and I'm liking it so far in which Keitaro has had enough of the girls and tries to get on with his life.

Also Naru and Motoko have the gall to say that Keitaro is being rude when they don't take responsibility for their own wrongs and just blame Keitaro for everything! Its disgusting and horribly immature! Also if they want to talk about rudeness what about the way they speak to Keitaro, the way they speak to other males, the way they speak to people who disagree with them or even how they assault Keitaro...the list goes on and on.