Reviews for The coffee Girl
Cutethulhu chapter 1 . 8/2/2011
I'm going to have to get this out of my system. My apologies in advance:

WHERE? WHERE IS THE PUNCTUATION? WHY ARE THERE NO PERIODS IN THE DIALOGUES THAT WOULD NORMALLY SIGNIFY THAT THE CHARACTER HAS EITHER STOPPED TALKING OR BEGUN A NEW SENTENCE? WHY ARE ONLY THE FIRST COUPLE LINES OF DIALOGUE SEPARATED WHILE THE OTHERS MUST MAKE DO WITH SHARING THE SPACE THAT THEY SHOULD NOT BE SHARING? WHY ARE THERE NO COMMAS SIGNIFYING THAT THE DIALOGUE HAS BEEN TEMPORARILY INTERRUPTED BY TEXT AND THEN RESUMED? ; D:

And that last sentence sounded rather Sue-ish, just saying...
silvazetz chapter 1 . 7/17/2011
AHEM* Since I'm your best friend and lover... I will be honest, that this was sappy garbage. DISMISSED!