I love how you got into Ash shoes. That's really like him. I really can't believe it. You're a great writer, and I hope you will write more of Phantom Brave in the future :D

It's rare to see a Phantom Brave story, but thats why it's so nice when someone writes one. This was a very nice story that really makes you remember why this is such a great game. Besides a few mistakes here and there, I'd say you wrote a very wonderful fic.

its really good. tell me when you update and i'll be sure to keep reading.

Not a bad little reflective piece. Though it doesn't have any story, it captures Ash and Marona's characters right on without feeling forced in any way. It's good now and then to read a reflective piece like this and remember why you love this game for more than just the gameplay.

There are a lot of errors, these being the most potentially embarrassing:

1."And so the fearful avoid the island, and thus the island was thus called:" Maybe it was meant to be humorous, but that sentence has far more cause-effect conjunctions than it needs. It should be "The fearful avoid the island, and thus the island was called:"

2."Orphaned by her parents at the age of 7," It was one of Sulphur's demons that orphaned her, not her own parents.

3."Time pasted by quickly," That should be "passed", not "pasted".