OH, Boy!

Whoa! Nicely done.

Nice. You've drawn me in. Wonderful work. I like this side of Snape.

Hmmmmm... interesting. interesting enough to continue. YOu have my interest.

Gah!
Such a bloody cute fucking story!
I love it, and I wish there was more...
Her crush on Harry and his crush on her is the most ADORABLE thing to witness...
And even though she's an OC, she's not one of those ridiculously annoying, bimbo-bitch types, or one that's good at everything she does and stubbornly ignores common sense and reason.
Again, I wish there was more...

It's been so long since you have updated, but this story is amazing and I won't give up hope that you'll be back someday.

Brilliant story update soon please.

What an absolutely brilliant story you have here. I love your OC it feels as though she really fits into the Harry potter world. Your writing style is impeccable, I admire the amount of detail and emotion you put into it. I can honestly say I thoroughly enjoyed this story, however, I have realized that it's been quite some time since you've last updated. I sincerely hope that you haven't abandoned this fan fiction because I am eager to know what happens next for tori as she finally has the family she's always wanted. Thank you so much for the pleasurable chapters you have written thus far and here's to hoping that you'll continue to dazzle me with your amazing writing.

Aaahhh! Its so sweet! 3 I cried!

This is by far the best HP fic I've ever read - please, please, PLEASE write some more? I wanna know what happens to Tori next! o.o

Hello!

I stumbled quite accidentally over this story and was very skeptic at first. The Harry Potter genre and OC's usually don't go along well, but I must say you did an amazing job thus far.

This Fanfiction is so refreshing and the ideas very original, I don't know what's not to like.

What impressed me the most was your introduction of Tori into the Harry Potter world. Most authors take the quick route and just slab on some Mary Sue that changes schools.
You on the other hand show us a person; I have the feeling that I know Tori since her birth, because I DO. The very first time we see her is as a baby.
And then you do not just try to fit her in with Rowlings Harry Potter. You give her her own friends, and just by giving her Tom Riddle's diary and letting her tell HER story, you make it possible. I read this, because I wanted to know what she would do. Not because of Harry Potter.

Another positive aspect is your writing style.
Many authors on this site make the mistake of only changing Rowlings words slightly or not at all.
That is something I think you are avoiding greatly.
The sentences "Victoria was, in her opinion, a well-read girl. She'd been called a 'bookworm' for years now and had a tested University reading level. But never in all the books she had read, had any author described anything as amazing as Diagon Alley." where the point where I consciously decided to read this Fanfiction further, because in that moment I knew that this would, without doubt be sometjing different.

Scenes, like the one where McGonnagal questions Sir Cadogan after Blacks attack are excused in my mind, as those are rarely used and as such "fresh". (Or maybe I have it wrong and it's not at all like in the books because I should already be sleeping for four hours. Maybe it's just Toris POV that makes all the difference. Sorry I am rambling.)

As the story progresses, some things get clearer, but a few are still leaving questions marks in my head. This is by no means a bad thing - Without these questionmarks and the ensuing suspense I would want to read further.
Though I could guess rather early who Toris mother was, I was very surprised about Lupin being her father.
Rather mysterious are also Severus Snape's reasons and motives. If he knows that Tori is Lupins daughter and we know that he has no special connection to his mother, why was he so open and outright friendly to Tori from the beginning?

And sadly - this is a minus point - that is the most interesting question that keeps me following at the moment. Harry and Tori's relationship is quite cute and very IC, but at the foreground. The main conflict (Tori has found out who her parents are and wether she has to go back to her unloving homeor not) has been resolved. I am sure there will be things following, but either you have not installed enough foreshadowing, or I am too tired at the moment to have seen and remembered them.

Regardless, thank you for sharing such an original idea with us. Please be not let down by the lack of reaction up to know (29 reviews as I am writing), you have done an amazing job thus far and I am sure you will continue to do so.

Regars,
Aldryl

PS.: Please excuse any grammatical errors, English is not my first language and although I am normally quite good at it, it is late and I stayed up quite late to be able to read your fanfiction in one go and leave review :)

This is pretty great so far. I have nothing bad to say against your writing, which I like a lot for being descriptive while staying concise. The only bone I have to pick is that Victoria doesn't appear to have any major effect on canon. Other than the understandable character/plot building, Victoria doesn't really change the sequence of events - she practically lives out Ginny's role in the Chamber of Secrets, down to even discovering Percy and his girlfriend, and in the Shrieking Shack scene, it's as if she doesn't even exist considering the impact she has. So, going forward, you should keep up the great writing, but try considering the broader effects an extra character would have on happenings.

I just finished reading through all of your current chapters, and I really like what you've done with the story so far. I especially enjoyed how thorough you were with Tori's (if I may call her thus; haha) back-story and that you didn't force her friendship with Harry. Development is, to me, one of the keys to making a good story, so it was all a real treat for me!

Also, I found it refreshing to see the plots of Books 2 & 3 play out from an entirely fresh perspective than that of the original canon. I understand the desire some authors have to work their way through the canon years in their respective stories, but that also means the reader has to read the same plots over and over again (not to mention the original read of the canon books!). So again, thank you for choosing to honor canon but use a different viewpoint ;)

You know, after the prologue, I was certain that you were setting things up for Snape to be her father. Remus as her father makes more sense now though that you exposed her mother as a Black, since we all know Sirius was the only one not in Slytherin.

This last scene was just too cute with Tori running into her father's arms.

Please update again soon!

Really enjoying this story so far and am looking forward to reading more. Keep up the good work