the last sentence broke my heart..

I think you should make a sequalto this fic.

Poor Alfred... I think that's the third time ive put that in a review tonight... I love CanAme (in that order) but I also love RusAme... And RussAmeCan XD XD so if you could do one of those, that would be awesome! I liked this. You should make a sequel.

hi im just saying this was my 1st fanffic and its still on my top 5 and ive yet to get an acount

o...m...g... ASDFGHJKL YOU MADE ME REALIZE HOW MUCH I LOVE THE DARK SIDE OF THIS COUPLE! /SHOT...you have done well...

You've officially made a RussiaXAmerica addict...XD Great story! I loved it, and what you did with the lead pipe was really interesting. All in all this was pretty AWESOME!

If you don't mind me saying.

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I'll start out with the good things.

Your grammar is actually very good and I'm relieved of it, as usually with these types of stories that is somewhat uncommon. Your diction and syntax itself, is also decent, and I find it easy to follow.

However, the characters seem unfortunately two-dimensional. They aren't as 2-D as "I R rapist!Russia, hear me kolkolkol while I yell out comrade every five seconds' but it's coming dangerously close. The reason I say this is because while near the end of your story, Russia isn't completely demonized, his reasons for raping America remain unclear and very random. And while I don't mind rape fics at all, I find that if you are going to write in Russia's point of view, at least give us some reasons/motives as to why he is doing this. Failure in doing so makes his character look very flat, and another causualty to rapetruck!Russia (regardless if this was your intention).

The only problem that I had with America is that many people seem to forget that he has super strength, and handcuffs would be nothing to him. So, seeing him being helpless against them, kinda takes me out of the story. I feel (and this is entirely my opinion) that if you want to have America restrained successfully, you would need to make it so that he was emotionally, psychologically, and/or spiritually wounded and unable to fight against his captor, as well as physically being restrained. Either this or have Russia be at equal or at greater strength than his current state.

I also wished that you would have given us more of a setting that we could envision. It helps set up the mood.

If I come off as harsh then I apologize, but I feel that you need to hear this because I believe that you have great potential.

I would say no to a revenge sequel because I really don't see America (or at least the America in your story) capable of stooping as low as the 'monster' that he insists Russia is. So no to a revenge sequel but I wouldn't mind a sequel explaining Russia's behaviors and/or a resolution of sorts (or not lol).

So all in all, your grammar is solid, story fluid, but characters are a little flat. Please keep up the good work, and I hope you don't take this critique too harshly : )

I adore this story! I'd love to see a sequel to it! I'm quite the fan of noncon stories and you are very good at writing them! Perhaps you would consider writing a noncon story threesome between America, Germany and Prussia? I think that would be an interesting combination!

Don't worry, even Christians don't follow Christian rules. And boy, Russia sure messed up my poor Gilbert, didn't he? Anyway, great story. Context would have helped, but it was fine without it. And you're right, no one likes Russia. But no one (NO ONE) fucks with him. Love your writing.

I just love Russia in this story. IvanAlfred 4 ever.

Oy.. don't make me feel bad for Russia when he raped America. Man, you know how to mess with a girl's emotions. XD

Lovely though. Well written, and enjoyable.

*immediately becomes a fan of RusAme*

PLEASE FOR THE LOVE OF YAOI AND MOTHER RUSSIA MAKE A SEQUEL!

When I discovered, from your Author's Note at the bottom of the page, that you were willing to write One-shots for people who reviewed, I almost cried with joy. I don't suppose that you would be willing to write some pre-Cuban revolution America/Cuba, would you? It would make me a very happy person!

Anyway, good job; I imagine that non-con is extremely difficult to write, but you managed it very well! (Unfortunately for America).

I loved it. Honestly. The way you potrayed Ivan was dead on, and Alfred's reactions, perfect.