Good

the pokemon in the eggs should be mewtwo and a legendary dragon type pokemon (if they have any)

this is like the book 1 pokemon and percy Jackson crossover where percy turns into ash

great story. keep writing. update soon. I can't wait to read more! This is getting interesting.

Sort of expected them to hand over the stolen pokemon right away, especially considering that they were stolen from a hospital and could be injured or sick.

What will Poliwag evolve into? Toad or Wrath? If Evolution Item (King's Rock, Dragon Scale, Metal Coat etc) work on contact like the Stones, what would happen if Poliwhirl touched a King's Rock and a Water Stone at the same time? A green Poliwrath without a swirl on the stomach?

This is really very good. Definitely one of the better 'smart/mature Ash' fics I've read. Well done and thank you for not sticking with a canon Gary, this is actually closer to the original japanese version of the Gary/Ash relationship than the American Anime is. Then again, the orignal Japanese one had Misty thinking she's the hottest thing in the room (every room) and Brock's 'flirting' was him asking whether or not the girl is 18 yet.

Great story, fantastic first chapter, I can't wait for more.

Do ashxleaf

r u gonna update

I'm gonna bail out already. Sorry, but that Pokemon translator is one of the most anoying things I have ever read. If such a convenient device existed...anime, manga and game would be completely different. I don't like it. Pokemon might have some conversations between themselves, but your average trainer should NOT understand them. It would be far better to get the basics of what they mean from body language, thus showing a close connection...possibly a Psychic Pokemon, but then an extremely powerful one. Or a Psychic trainer with a psychic pokemon.

THis device? Out of nowhere? Ruined any possible enjoyment I might have gotten from this story. It would mean too much focus on the conversations between pokemon and humans.

plz tell me this isn't going to turn out to be a egoshipping (misty/gary) it is my lest fav shipping ever

plz be a pokeshipping (ash/misty)

I say that was a brilliant chapter, I hope to see more very soon. As for a good Naruto Story, I would suggest Of Demons and Gods by AJ-Writer. It's hilarious, adventurous, awesome, if you like bloody battles as well, then this is best to read, I love it a lot. Well you have a nice day 534.

Sincerely,

Shin'en

Well that was a great chapter indeed. As for the Rock Type Pokemon I would suggest a Rhyhorn and Onix instead. Why? Because Ash tried to catch one before, but couldn't because Tauros always got in the way in the Pokemon Banned Episode of the Safari Zone and for the Onix, well Ash never had an Steel Type Pokemon. Well I hope you take that for consideration, see ya soon.

Sincerely,

Shin'en Shukumei

The King of Chaos

Also I like the idea of Ash getting a Egg of a Torchic.

I must this is a good start and story, also that was an excellent chapter as well. I think this will be good story to read.

Sincerely,

Shin'en

Great chapter, looking forward to the next chapter.

Great chapter, looking forward to the next chapter.