She died?!

sweet and romatic

THIS IS A MARY-SUE. You have disgraced Tolkien!

FACTS:

1) There are only NINE ASSIGNED to go to Mordor to destroy the ring. ONLY NINE. Letting her come and join the *group* doesn't mean that she's a repleacement to GANDALF.

2) " He thought it odd that a Lorien elf would have dark hair" As said before, Lorien elves are natural blondes.

3) Her skin - the things you try to make a perfect character *shakes her head*...

My explanation why mary-sue are rampant: "That’s why people creates Mary-Sue cause they know that Fanfictions are a free expression of their aspirations and dreams or sort of…But, some of them tend to get out of hand you know. They tend to create *a girl* [which is, in fact, themselves] who’s perfect and beautiful so that the man they wanted can fall in love with them easily."

Don't tell me otherwise, dear. Please. if you really want to make a story, make it at least BELIEVABLE. sheesh!

Erm... It was good, only I think you made Alatariel and Legolas fall in love WAY too quickly... It was a good plot, it just needed more of the two to have somewhat of a bonding before, "I love you."

this is such a good fanfiction!i can't wait until you update!

What a heap of shit.

NO! I DID NOT READ THIS CHAPPY AND I HAVE NO INTENTIONS OF DOING SO! ARGH.. Nice profile you got there. See, This is just another fic you crazy authors write so you can indulge yourself in your own personal fantasies, but please, warn us before hand. No wonder you called her Alatariel or wotever the fuck her name is. Orlando Bloom is ugly. he sucks at acting and has no facial expression at all, how is that good acting.
SPELL ELVISH RIGHT FOR ERU'S SAKE ! its Elvish. Which makes me think you were lying about the whole, 'favorite book - everything by Tolkien'
Good bye

Okay... First off, Yes, I agree that this is a mary-sue.. But hey, thats okay, as long as you don't... I dunno... Make it worse.. Off course, Im reviewing as I read, cos thats my style.. Anyways.. Let's start... First paragraph, I think your too forward. Don't start your fic straight off by describing someone, hint the details in later. For example, she brushed her brown hair out of her face, 'Darn this insufferable long hair' she thought.. or something like that.. make it more part of the story and not narration cos that just, well, most of the more avid readers would hate this fic off the bat.
Okay, you see.. this is totally a mary-sue.. Blah blah blah.. gift of song... blah... sword fighty and longknife.. You make her seem too perfect already. Try to have her do something thats not perfect cos that would totally lessen the whole, ew, its a mary0sue, lemme go flame this story now!, thing..
Okay, I'm really getting sick of this crap.. Hmm, lemme use my LOTR knowledge for thee... Elves for mirkwood are Silvan elves, Silvan elves do not have brown hair, THEY HAVE BLONDE HAIR! If you wanna write a lotr fanfic, please do us ALL a favor and read the god damn books... (The silmarillion should be read also).. If she's from Mirkwood, why does she not bow before her prince? Isn't that of custom? Please just make this.. I dunno.. realistic? I'm confuzzled by the whole... story...
"Alatariel closed her eyes, and breathed in deeply. As she did this, she remembered the strange dreams she had been having for weeks. In her dreams, strangers came to Lothlorien to seek assistance from Galadriel. The strangers were on a quest of some sort, and Alatariel joined them. "
Oh no! Foreshadowing! Now she can tel the future in her drams! *gaspeth* thats so original, I'm going to jump off a cliff now!
"When she reached Galadriel’s court" ... "As she ascended the stairs leading to the court,"
First you say she's at the damn court, then your like, oh no, I change my mind! she's going to start going up the stairs now!
And oh gasp, she doesn't know that Legolas is the god damn prince of her land. Even when one is young and they leave home, they would've known who their prince truly was.
"She had an expression of concern on her face, but even through that, Legolas saw her true beauty"
WTF are you saying? He saw her true beauty! oh gag. Seriously.
*resists the urge to flame even more so* This is a piece of crap.. hmm.. thats alright though.. could be worse.. You could have add that she was an excellent archer! and that all the guys were soo smitten with her, they wanted to rape her.. Blah blah blah.. She's beautiful! Lemme kill myself now.
Please do not hate me for my comments cos I can't stand when some authers are ungrateful to their reviewers who give help..
Please read the books, don't just be a movie fan. If you really love the movie, then read the books to know what really happens. I'm sick of all this crap people make up, ruining Tolkiens story, the good story. Wait.. reading you info, it says you read anything by Tolkien, well then, how can you still manage to screw these important things up! Crazy kids these days *shouldn't be talking*
And I hope you dont mind, but I wanna say stuff to your reviewers as I often do, so *starts reading reviews*
Dear Mellowyellow 36, Go to hell. people who flame mary-sues are most likely ones who can write better than most people, could write better than you, and at least have read the books, which I doubt you have. Sure this person who wrote this fic is a good writer, at least some of us flamers have the decency to i dunno, include helpful criticism, so shut the f* up okay?
Bane of Mary-Sues: Hey! I totally agree with the whole, we're gonna look back and think we were stupid. And I also agree that people should respect Tolkien. Tolkien rocks!
The Cynic: A little bit overboard there.
Nebulae's review on first chappie: Okay, think wot you wanna think, but if one is really I dunno, anal about these things like me, they would be sarcastic cos these things are important to them.
Dora; The Vampire Lestat: Hm.. I love your flames! haha.. I mean.. yea
And thats all.. Oh.. Evlen Princess23, please stop writing now I mean, this could only go downhill.. Cya!

I'd like to say, that I totally agree with Cimmie, and people that complain about mary~sues are just annoyed that they can only write bull,and are driven by there meaningless consumer driven life and want to rag out on cool writers like you!please update! who really gives a damn if shes mary~sueish!this story rocks! but wht can't the guy ever get hurt? keep up the great work! :~) ~Kay

What's wrong with you? You can't keep your little personal fantasies to yourself so you have to share them with the world? Eru, just shut the hell up. And to your reviewers...
Cammie- You retard. That is NOT the point of fanfiction. The point of fanfiction is...well to be honest, it has no point, seeing as none of us can get rich off of it, and someday we're all going to look back on this and cry at how stupid we were. (whoa, moment of sanity there, not a good sign). Anyhoo, if you're gonna write this shit, at least respect the Good Professor Tolkien and keep the facts straight.

I command you to stop this awful garbage. THE POWER OF CHRIST COMPELS YOU! THE POWER OF CHRIST COMPELS YOU! (if you're Islamic) THE POWER OF MUHAMMAD COMPELLS YOU! (if you're Buddhist) THE POWER OF BUDDHA COMPELS YOU! (if you're Hindu) THE POWER OF SHIVA COMPELS YOU! (if you're Jewish) THE POWER OF IAHOVA (Jahova you dummy) COMPELS YOU!

I command you to stop this awful garbage. THE POWER OF CHRIST COMPELS YOU! THE POWER OF CHRIST COMPELS YOU! (if you're Islamic) THE POWER OF MUHAMMAD COMPELLS YOU! (if you're Buddhist) THE POWER OF BUDDHA COMPELS YOU! (if you're Hindu) THE POWER OF SHIVA COMPELS YOU! (if you're Jewish) THE POWER OF IAHOVA (Jahova you dummy) COMPELS YOU!

I really like this story! Please update soon!

Aw! this story is so lovely! Such heart has bin placed within it! You must carry on writing more chapters, for i wish to continue reading your wonderful work!

not half bad story, not done yet so im not gonna review the actual story but just wanted to tell you that "melamin" is Quenya for my love. Quenya is the archaic tongue of the high elves; upon reaching middle-earth once again they adopted the Gray Elf language, Sindarin. Queyna is sort of like "elf latin" if you'd like. Legolas would speak Sindarin or Silvan. "meleth nín" is my love, or "melethril" which is "female lover" in Sindarin. Justa a lil somethin to consider, not a major flaw. keep writing! _