Reviews for No Time Like the Present |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Cute |
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![]() ![]() ![]() This was a joy to read! Truly wish it had happened on the actual show! Great work! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awwwwwww so cute Can u continue this story |
![]() ![]() ![]() a shame this is a one shot missy cause you scored great ! loved it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like the idea of where this story is going, but I couldn't finish because there were too many editing mistakes. Here are a couple examples: "And seen as this was alt-world..." Normally it would be "seeing as" but since this story is in the past tense it should be avoided, not changed to "seen as". "As it turns out Daniel was a very good kisser." The rest of the story is in past tense so it should be "it turned out". "Trust her to even in an alternate reality, but then as she recalled Amanda was far from monogamous, and with Daniel's half-brother of all people." This sentence is a fragment and has no complete thought in it. Trust her to what? I'm trying not to be nit picky but there are a lot more, these are just some examples. For me, the grammar mistakes just became too distracting. I would work on editing or getting a good beta because the story idea seems interesting and your writing itself is good. |
![]() ![]() REally Hot! I love it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() i like it |
![]() ![]() Please write mooooore, I really enjoyed your story! XD |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aww cute story, i really liked it. Favourited! |
![]() ![]() ![]() nice one |
![]() ![]() loved it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hot! I wish they would have had THAT in the show. ;). Is this a one shot or are you going to continue the story? I can't wait to read your other stories too. |