This is good but dont repeat the chapters. anyways i think danny and scott should be called Dott. we should let more people know and make this official!

this story is good but you need to cut out the repeating chapters

So...Hey. What's up? I noticed you haven't replied in a month or two. Just checking to see if your still living. :) - Emmett.

very good story, continue , this seems very intereting and intense.

This is a good story! The edited chapters being added kinda bothers me cause I feel like it's jus a rewritten chapter which should be posted as an updated chapter not a new chapter itsel but I suppose I shouldn't complain that your updating! This is a great story I hope to read more from you soon!

Loved it can't wait for more

Loved it awesomeness talk bout awkward

Im likng where this is going, though fourth last sentance not shure if thats Scott and Stiles you meant thwre not stiles and danny?

"We'd been best friends ever since we were little, ever since he moved in down

the street. Scott and Danny had been friends practically since birth. Our

relationship had nothing on it."

loved it can't wait for more

loved it awesome

i like this story so much cant wait to see wat happens

Loved it

Loved it

Hi! I really liked where you were going with this, but I had ust a few things I hope I can help you with!

First, when writing dialogue you should always have a space between in example:

"Hey Danny, I'm heading to the mall this afternoon, want to go with?" Jackson asked as he and Danny walked to lacrosse practice.

"Naw, I'm good I have to do some partner stuff with Stiles for a project..."

Second, find a free spell check online somewhere and use it! We all make mistakes and there's no shame in using one!\

Third, make sure all the appropriate letters are capitalized when needed such as in the line "When i'm with..." the I in I'm should be capitalized.

Next make sure your sentences flow correctly:

The older boy answered sat on the bed of the shorter boys and answered his phone "Hello?"

this sentence is a little confusing and it jumps from him answering to just sat on the bed. The sentence should have a little more detail, like "The older boy answered his phone while sitting on the other boys bed." You want words to flow and not discombobulated.

Anyways I do enjoy your story and where you went with it and I hope you dont find my advice too critical as I just want to help :)

lol I like it. But, Uhmm, I don't think I'm being rude or anything, but do you mind if I edit it? It's alot of errors in it.