Hun, you did great, but you just need to make it more understandable, I had a hard time following through the story. Is Crissy a human? And in the beginning she asked, "Why can't I be Megatron's sparkmate?" then later on in the story Shockwave says Crissy doesn't want to be his sparkmate. You need to go back through and fix it. Sorry if I offended you or hurt your feelings, I didn't mean to be harsh, but other people will be way more cruel, so just fix that please.

'Till all are one

Silverswipe