Your birth was a mistake. You should kill yourself.

I genuinely hope you kill yourself. I think the world would be a better place without disgusting cretins like yourself. You're the type of person that makes me want to puke. You're horrible and I hope you die a slow, painful death. I would laugh so hard. Seriously. I promise you.

BASTARD

Woo...remake.

TheCrtTeam

So far, this is pretty good! You do a very good job on the battles, and nicely capture Ash's tendency to use unorthodox strategies. It's also nice to see a writer who uses semicolons for a change :)
Just want to point out though, that between chapters 12 and 13, you somehow switched from "a white box where no light can escape" to "a yellow box where no light can escape." Was this change deliberate?

My goodness, I didn't even make it past the first seven chapters from WPC week way back when with my reviews? Looks like I've got some major catching up to do then. Just like old times, eh? You know, just with longer reviews and about fifty less chapters to catch up on.

So, you kicked things off with Mark, Emily, and Shane making their first grand appearance in this revamped version. I actually like this one a lot better than their introduction in OtWS. It was much easier to sort out which character was doing and saying, and their intentions of breaking into the prison were clear. But beyond that, it sets them up extremely well to leap into action almost immediately, or at least whenever they get another appearance in the fic, and it goes really nice with your goal of progressing with this fic quicker and having less filler.

One thing that I did find a bit strange in that scene though was that you seemed to switch perspectives there when you went on to describe the prison. Before that, you had been describing what Mark had seen through his binoculars, and then you sort of shifted perspective slightly to portray the prison in detail to paint a picture for the readers, including things such as the sound of the electrical fence that Mark clearly wouldn't be able to hear. While it was very detailed and gave a much better picture of the compound than just seeing it through Mark's binoculars could ever hope to do, it just seemed like a weird shift to me. Yeah, I dunno. Moving on.

Ash's debut battle in the World Pokémon Championships has officially begun! Gotta say, liking the battle descriptions a lot, as to be expected. The whole thing flows pretty nicely and maintains a high level of detail without overloading the reader. Not that I expected anything less, haha. Did notice a few places in there where you didn't need a comma that you had put in, but that's not really that big of a deal.

So, Bulbasaur, eh? I like the choice. He was definitely a good pick for Ash to lead his first battle off with, considering he has been with him for a long time and rarely if ever gets to make an appearance in the show. Here's hoping he'll be able to kick that Drapion's butt, because Bulbasaur is cool and yeah.

Also, funk. Just because I had to put that in there after your A/N. ;)

Until next time!

I like this story, its just so well detailed and paced its natural.

Got an OC I'll submit, up to you to use it or not.

Name: Valon Knight

Gender: Male

Age: 18

Hometown: Nuvema town

Appearance: Medium length dirty brown hair, often messy and untamed. Friendly gray eyes, and tanned skin from all his traveling outdoors.

clothes: Black nike shoes worn from use and time, basic blue jeans and a plain white T-shirt.

Personality: Generally uncaring about his appearance or planning he'll often run head first both into life and into battle without any prior forethought. Fighting seemingly random and driven by instinct he trusts his Pokemon completely to come out on top. Jumping head first into any situation he has learned the hard way to think quickly to avoid disaster. A true believer in the phrase, "Live in the moment."

History: A history not at all uncommon. Grew up in Nuvema town, getting a Tepig at age ten and going on a journey. Making it to the Unova League he managed to make it to the semi finals but lost, eventually deciding to go through sinnoh he placed around the same place in the Sinnoh League. Deciding after that to just stay at home in Unova and train his Pokemon to become stronger before embarking on any more adventures.

Pokemon:

Emboar: Male, Blaze ability. Knows Flare Blitz, Flamethrower, Hammer arm, and Wild Charge

Lucario: Male, Inner Focus ability. Knows Aura Sphere, Close Combat, Iron tail, and Dragoon Pulse

Liepard: Female, Limber ability. Knows Assist, Slash, Hyper Beam, and Night Slash

Staraptor: Male, Intimidate ability. Knows Brave Bird, Quick Attack, Aerial Ace, and Close Combat.

Heracross: Male, Swarm ability. Knows Megahorn, CLose Combat, Hyper beam, and Brick Break

Zebstrika: Female, Motordrive ability. Knows Wild Charge, Flame Charge, Stomp, and Agility.

Easily one of the most well-written and engaging stories I've read on this site. I sincerely thank you for the amount of effort you put into this story. I'm sure its not easy writing those battles with such vivid descriptions, especially breaking 100k words. Can't wait for the next chapter! Again, thank you for a great story!

So far so good, actually not too bad at all. I actually have never read your first story so I don't know what to expect but I hope it will be promising, the only thing I'm worried about is that maybe the battle scenes won't be good. If you're bad at them then you should go check out "A New Master's Quest" it is an amazing story with great battle scenes.

So we have calm in the tournament and a storm in Siberia... and Shamouti Island is targeted. Let the fun begin...

Holy shit thats a helluva escape.

And did I see a reference to Anthony Silva just now losing horribly? Damn That name is one of my own OC for Tendou Souji's Zenith League but damn Aron he had to lose 3-nothing? lol

Still cant wait for the next chapter

Excellent