oyesssssss that was beautiful...listened to stay with me while reading...aaaa love love

fluff and smut :) always a good combo :) excellent work!

Very good for a first fic. _ I'm impressed. The only thing that you need to work on is paragraphs. Try to keep all of your paragraphs about the same length, or at least somewhat similar. Large chunks of text on a screen can be difficult for some people, and kind of disrupt the flow of the story.
Other than that, though, you did great! Nice wording, everything was clearly stated, etc! Thank you for posting. :)

I LOVE this story!

Most Ao no Exorcist's Okumuracest I found were superseme Yukio/unbelievably uke Rin...which I dislike vehemently. Their relationship, their brotherhood I believe is close to what you've depicted. And the smut was well done! This is a well-written story, thanks so much for sharing!

Whoa... wonderfully hot! XD

Yay! It's seme!Rin! Squeeee!
I love this so much, great job. I also loved how cute Yukio was in this too (so many conflicting emotions right now!) Anyways, amazing job.

Sweet and hot

awwww
so cute!

So sweet! Hot too! Loved it, great story!

This is absolutely the BEST twincest fanfic I have ever experienced! XD

hott and adorably cute! D

this story is very good, i like how it has some shots of a plot :D i prefer Rin as the seme but the world seems to prefer otherwise :( so thank u for writing this! :DD

wow who knew tthis could be so sweet

Awesome!

This..This friggin' deserves an award. I love it! It was so hot yet touching. It was perfect! And I love how you made Rin the 'leading' one. XD Can't get enough of these two. Anyways, hope to see more from you. More ao no twincest please 8).