I smelled contradiction...
Shadow: "Being an Enderman, I am incapable of wanting things or feeling emotion."
Chapter 3: "Nothing..." he mumbled, embarrassed. He stood up and frantically brushed his hair back like he wanted to impress me, but all it did was tint his black hair red with blood from his hands. It did give it a cute slick look though.
Chapter 5: "A game?" Shadow said, almost angrily. "They think this is all a game?"
Chapter 6: "Not like the body chest, like a treasure chest," Shadow laughed. "I don't have it with me right now, the chest is in the house. I only need to look at it like once or twice while I'm making the stuff, I've memorized nearly all the recipes."
Chapter 11: Soon, we couldn't see each other's faces, and I began to get scared, grabbing on to... something. A loud "Ouch!" proved that it was Shadow's head, and I let go feverishly, both of us extremely embarrassed.

This is a good start I am a Minecraftian myself so I am real pationate about the way the game is perceived by people.
The first chapter is fantastic but there are some miner spelling errors that you need to check out but otherwise well done.
Excuse the Pun by the way XD

I am literally crying right now. WHY DID YOU KILL EVERYONE? poor sploosh...

I love this story! :)
question to Will: Have you ever been to Stuttgart or Lake Village?

So the first thing that runs through her mind when someone is knocking on the door, trying to escape death is"So it was a human! It sounds like a guy, too! hopefully he is cute!"? Makes total sense! Sarcastic btw.

...not bad.
I like how this is written, and it makes sense that she is a noob. Good job.

Hindsight #2

Your main character has no problem killing pigs chickens and cows herself. But the second she sees a dog she suddenly gains "animal loving girly instincts"

I wish dogs in minecraft were that OP. Cause then I would stop getting rear-ended by zombies. More of a minor nuisence than a threat but still.

I couldn't help but have the Notch / Herobrine conversation played out monty python style. Instant humor increase.

*wakes up after falling asleep only to see world is made of cubes*
Huh... must be in minecraft...

This is the equivalent of someone waking up in hyrule and just going "huh. Well time to cut some grass"

In hindsight that is HORRIBLY rushed. Anyone would at least have a double take.

o_o (: #-#-#-# best fan fic ever.

how do you get to the dA page

WHY DID WILL DIE! HE WAS LIKE MY FAVE CHARACTER!

Awesome story! I know this might be a bit late for the survey but whatever -_-
1. My favorite character would be Adeline[cause she's freaking Adeline(no explanation needed)]. My least favorite character would be a tie between Shadow and Claire, mostly because Claire was a *insert cuss words* and Shadow because of the last chapter of the story. WHY U DO DIS TO MEH?!
2. You really can't choose a favorite scene, in my opinion. It all fits together and you can't just single one out. (This sounds stupid.) AHEM! Moving on.
3. The death that affected me the most would be Will and the least would be Claire. Since Claire is my least favorite character, obviously I would care less for her. Will... words cannot describe what I felt when Will sacrificed himself. I guess that must be it, that Will sacrificed himself instead of letting Adeline die. Oh, and also because he's Adeline's boyfriend.
4. My favorite quote by far was by Shadow, twice. "You have an intestine in your hair, Adeline" and "You have an eggshell in your hair, Adeline" were my favorite quotes because um... I really don't have a reason. Nevermind the reason.
5. Shadow. Need I say more? I also knew that Will would die. Kinda cliche, no offense. I expected for Claire to survive, but she died. YASSSSSSS! Sorry, I'm exceptionally violent today.
6. I normally don't like to give criticism, but since this story is so AWESOME, I'll try my best. However, I saw you spell Wierd wrong a couple of times. (I don't know if that's intentional, but it ruined my OCD, so I had to point it out). The transition from 16 to 17 wasn't the smoothest, as I was thoroughly confused for a while. Also, in chapter 2, you said "I opened up the front zipper of my bag, and there was an odd marking, like a 4x4 grid with a square to the right of it." However, as you know, it's a 2x2 square. I assume that's a typo. Other than that, there is no "least favorite part of the story", since the plot is great.
7. 110. Yup, that's how awesome your story is.
Peace out,
PCOverdose

Sorry, you made a spelling error twenty-six lines above this, it says "She grabbed it and ran back upstairs." It should be upstairs not upstairs! I love this chapter more than the original!

So far, I prefer the original first chapter. Then again, I can't judge this rewrite until I fully read it!

Hello! Pastrinator64 here! I was just reading this once again for good ol' time's sake. So much nostalgia...
Anyway, while reading this, I just now got the whole Valkyries joke. The first time, it flew way over my head.
Oh yeah, and I forgot that I couldn't post this while logged in since I've already reviewed this chapter like that. XD Whups.
I look forward to any future installments, by the by! See you some time in the future, perhaps?
Pastrinator64