Hey :D

The review. Haha. Grabe even I'm nervous about reviewing this xD

Ahem. So, I actually find it nice how Jack and Ann interact with each other on the flashbacks. Especially when Jack forgot about the pie. haha.

But it's just sad that Jack had to go to the city though. And why did he have to tell her that he's leaving at the last moment? D:

As for the witch princess and the goddess, well I didn't understand that part a bit. Just the part where the witch princess said she wasn't that evil. Haha.

I'm really so sorry if my review is kind of confusing. xD

But I really did like the story. :bd I'm looking forward to others next time

Gosh I am so embarrassed. My family got struck with the flu and I've been taking care of them for a week, which made me forget about reviewing this story!

Loved the twists of the narrative. The ending was unexpected but suiting, and I enjoyed the transitions of the dating period between Jack and Ann and the conversation between Ann and Claire. As another review said, it did feel very movie-esque. The solemn undertones were also handled nicely.

I understand being nervous about writing romance. It's a tricky thing to handle, because each relationship is different. The Ann you created is perceptive and frustrated, which makes her someone the reader easily sympathizes with. In future stories, remember that you have that strength-that ability to make a character a reader can feel for-and don't be afraid to dive more into the messy goings of human interactions! I bet you could have done something really fun illustrating Jack and Ann's struggles if you felt like it, though it's understandable that you avoided putting in such a flashback and chose to discuss it instead. Don't sell yourself short, though, you can definitely write this. ;)

The ending of the story was my favorite part, though. I remember thinking Claire felt mysteriously ethereal at the beginning, and I was pleasantly surprised to see my hunches vindicated! Keep writing. :D

creative perspectives and transitions, good pace, intriguing, realistic interactions

This is good. I like that it addressed the difficulties of marriage; that's a topic most people are uncomfortable tackling. The pace and tone were really good, consistent throughout the entire fic, and I was intrigued the whole time, with both the main plot and the subplot with Claire/Witch Princess.

My favorite part was the way you handled the perspectives and transitions. That was really creative. I loved the change from first person to third, because that really enriched Ann's story. I've never really seen anything like that, so very cool. :) Also, transitioning from third to first using italicized words was also interesting.

The whole thing was very thematic, like it was in a movie. I could really picture each scene and interaction between the characters.

There were some grammar inconsistencies-you switched from past to present tense a couple times, and a couple prepositions were off. Nothing too major. In terms of the actual writing, I would've liked to see a little more expansion on the emotions. Like I said, this fic is like a movie, which is good in some ways, and maybe going into too much description with Ann's thoughts would have been overkill, but...

For example, though I definitely believed Ann and Jack were happy on their first date, I can't tell you exactly what she loved so much about him. They are described as talking about "random things" but I don't actually know what they have in common. And therefore, though the mood of the fic was very believably serious and sad, it was hard to see why Ann was so upset. Maybe including a scene where Jack acted distantly to her would have rounded the whole fic out.

Sorry, this got really long. But I definitely enjoyed reading this fic. It was really refreshing and interesting, and you handled the subject matter fairly well, especially if this is out of your comfort zone. Thanks for inviting me to read it! :)

I love this. Gosh. Totally not OOC or anything; I love how you wrote Ann as someone who wasn't extremely bubbly and crazy. This was a sort of solemn story, I liked this extremely. And the part that the Goddess and the Witch Princess played in this. Maligayang Pasko! :D

Wow, what a fantastic story.

Your descriptions were lovely and I loved the spin you put on Jack and Ann, and the twists were simply amazing as well - I didn't see any of them coming.

Reading back over the story for a second time the magic you wove with Claire as the Goddess was so well done!

The point of views are not confusing at all. Really you handled them very well!

I enjoyed this so much, I wish I could think of a stronger word to describe how I feel. I can tell you put a lot of thought into this and I never saw the ending coming! It was refreshing to read a story which focused more on the trails of married life opposed to pre-dating stages. And your descriptions were spot on, not large enough to be daunting but still containing enough substance to put a clear image in my head.

As I read "Clarie's" part I thought of her differently than I usually do. Her voice higher, if that makes sense. In fact before you said her name I though she could have been the Witch Princess messing with Ann. And while it did turn out to be the Harvest Goddess I didn't entirely see it coming. You balanced having a different Claire without being completely obvious about it. And Jacks reasoning, goodness! I kept thinking "please don't have him be cheating on her!" But no it wasn't and I audibly sighed (I don't usually do that).

The line "weird sounds that'll make the forest animals envious' made me smile. I need to stop before this gets too long. It was just very well done, Blood of Scarlet is a lucky recipient this Christmas.

Awwwwwwwwww.

This is the best gift ever. Thank you so much :3