truly beautiful, i love this!

This was dark and beautiful

Wow, just wow.
And if there are so many universes where the Puella Magi exist, then there are some in which Homura won.
Keep fighting Homura, and never give up.

sarha stop it. im here with the writers police and we're telling you to stop being such a good fic writer or Sanctions will have to be taken against you . hwy dont you try writing something Shitty in the mean time so that i can stop CRHYIGN FOR ONCE. (This fic was excellent and I had goosebumps esp. towards the end and this sentence is going to keep running on and on and on so I'll end it here: ur d best)

those last two lines man.

i didnt tear up until those last two lines ;_;

This was interesting and well done.

It could have been a little less heavy-handed, though. I mean what you were trying to say should have come from the story, with less being stated outright. Show, don't tell.

Wow. Just... wow. This unique spin on how different their lives would have been without the influence of Kyubey and magic, witches and the unfathomable despair that came from them, it absolutely boggles my mind. The writing style seems to come from an omnipotent being that is watching over every single timeline/dimension, and it fits somehow. The characters are all wonderfully in their element, and the stories fit their situation. Everyone's bit struck me hard, although Sayaka's seemed to lack something. What, I do not know, but perhaps Sayaka's story will always seem to be that way. Homura's especially was wonderfully handled, and my heart jumped when Madoka came up to save her. The emotion was conveyed properly and in a fitting manner.

The end brought everything to close and tied the entire story up quite nicely. A real piece of work finished with a flourish.

Thanks for the great read,

Vanui

omg everyone's reviewing! so proud :')

HEY SEXY LADY!

Characterization from the show was well preserved, it fit plausibly into the universe, and it was touching to boot. You write nicely as well. Good job.

This is really, really good, although I'm curious on what Kyouko will do about her abusive father, but I gotta say this is great. Could you maybe continue this story, and develop their relationships?

Excellent, compelling story, liked this a lot. Sayaka inspiring Kyouko could easily have been unconvincing, but with the point about Sayaka smiling it worked very well. All the situations were really touching.

Dang,This really shows what could have happened..would have happened. Its..its really heart-warming and sad ;u;

Mami still gets the short end of the stick though ._.

But everyone else moves on and grows up like they should have if an incubator hadn't hopped in.

Awesome Job.

omg babe i swear these are getting better and better! youre so good at writing now - feel so proud xx

This fic is actually really amazing. I've always been drawn to the concept of parallel worlds, and this just explores a completely foreign one (normalcy, gasp!) while keeping all the characters true to themselves, giving most of them a chance at happiness, and it's just wonderful! I do wish you said a bit more about Kyoko's father and what else might have caused him to snap (but then again, it could easily be attributed to their situation so I'm not really bothered). But yeah, great concept, great writing, great fanfic. Thanks for posting~

This fic is actually really amazing. I've always been drawn to the concept of parallel worlds, and this just explores a completely foreign one (normalcy, gasp!) while keeping all the characters true to themselves, giving most of them a chance at happiness, and it's just wonderful! I do wish you said a bit more about Kyoko's father and what else might have caused him to snap (but then again, it could easily be attributed to their situation so I'm not really bothered). But yeah, great concept, great writing, great fanfic. Thanks for posting~