Awesome! *blushes* Jet is so hot! I wonder what he looks like with no shirt on...

I read the entire story and here's my review: I liked it. However, it wasn't exactly what I was looking for...
I just think you put a little too much emphasis on failure and not enough on the Jet's philosophy. He:
"Failed to save his parents," "failed to out run Aang," "failed to destroy the town," etc.
Jet's very character in the show was based on Prejudice and Hate, not Failure. In fact, failure was never an issue with the cocky bastard. Yet here you turned him into Anikin Skywalker.
And don't get me wrong, you did a PERFECT job painting Jet's complex convoluted personality. The only problem is that you did too good. It was all building up the eventual crash, but then the ending just kinda said:
"I FAILED EVERYTHING! I'M A LOSER..."- Whereas I would have liked to here:" I"M AN IDIOT! I WAS A MONSTER..."
I wanted to hear what he was thinking when he was moping in that tree house for 6 weeks.
You could say, that the cannon never let Jet lose his prejudice, but it's the job of the fan fictional writer to fill in the blanks. Which is what you did very well, you told the untold story.

hey um i have a question in chapter ten ou said it was three weeks since katara left but then said that six weeks had passed

So sad to see this story drawing to an end so soon...

Ahh well, at least I got it while it was here. Thanks for writing the story, I shall check out more of your writings when you post them. Good luck with the mid-terms!

Oh, and as for the positive reviews? No problem, you deserved those and you deserve more.

Excellent chapter! It is really sad to see this all coming to an end, and, I understand about the month not being so great. Had my own problems as well. -

Poor Jet, finally gets it and then loses it all. Harsh.

So don't want this to end, but, I still can't wait for the final part.

Still enjoying this.

I like how you explained even better than the actual series about what was going on with Longshot and Jet.

Still sorry for the late reviews.

Wow. Nice. Emotional.

I'm kind of hoping that at some point Jet will realize he was wrong, and that he is the one to blame, not Smellerbee or Team Avatar.

I'm curious, is this going to cover Jet's journey to Ba Sing Se as well?

You continue to do a good job narrating Jet's thoughts and plans. You make him seem more human, more understandable. And it's clear that he has a conscience, but he's trying to convince himself that he's in the right.

Okay, I think I do see where you're coming from. And it is a good point.

"She needs to trust me, because I don't think she'll like my plan." I don't think Jet would really make that judgment at that point. So far Katara hasn't shown any sign that she wouldn't like his tactics - unless you count her being an overall nice person.

I really liked the part when Jet tells Katara about his past. "We'd gotten to the part of the conversation that I'd both anticipated and dreaded. Either she gets it, or she doesn't. Either I can tell her everything, or I can't." Also how he's expecting one reaction from her, of anger and hatred, but she doesn't give him that.

I also like how Jet does seem to have some feelings for Katara, but at the same time he's strategic and focused on his goals. That's very balanced and in character.

This is getting good! Keep it up!

You're welcome. :)

I'm not sure what to think of this chapter. It's an interesting idea, that the other Freedom Fighters pressured Jet into taking action, even if it meant destroying the village. But I think he's being out of character when he insists so zealously that they won't hurt the innocent people in the village. The whole thing with Rina seems to change the way he views the situation … In the series, Jet apparently doesn't think this way, that he can't put others what the Fire Nation put him through. That's his blind spot. He just wants to eradicate the Fire Nation, never mind who else he has to hurt to do it. On the other hand, your story proves that Jet is not heartless, even at this point in the series. I guess he is a complicated character to work with.

It's no trouble. Sorry I haven't been reading lately, too busy with my own writing, but I just came back now to see how it has progressed. Another few chapters! Thank you, the stories really cool at the moment. And, aww, I think it's cute Jet has a little sister, even if it's not biological. I can't wait till Katara comes in.

Interesting. That was kind of endearing. But - is this the same town that they destroy in Jet's titular episode? Then, would he destroy the town if his surrogate sister (if he really regards her as such) was in it? What would Rina do if she found out?

I hope you do continue to update! I want to see how things go when Jet meets Katara, how you'll narrate that, what will be the same, what might change.

I really like how you talked about Jet's relationships with the rest of the Freedom Fighters. I also like how you explore and portray Jet as a character. Like this line, "Homes were too permanent, and homes could be destroyed." Things like that actually say a lot.

You have Jet say, "What is it, Pipsqueak?" twice.

"It felt like a rock, but I could only be sure that it wasn't a dagger." Was that a typo?

I think you should put words in italics instead of all capital letters. It looks and sounds better to the reader.

I hope you continue this story! Update soon!

I'm not sure what to think of the fight. Sure, Jet can take down one man at a time, but if there's thirty of them - which is a lot of people to have come out of nowhere, to fight one small boy - they could easily charge, attack him together, and successfully capture him.

"He has self-restraint, a voice warned me." I don't think that's really true of Zhao. In the episode "The Deserter" it is explicitly stated that Zhao has no restraint or self-control.

I also don't understand why Zhao suddenly decides to burn down the village. Wouldn't he get in trouble for it, destroying a town occupied by the Fire Nation? Don't they just want to control it?

"Who lived here? They had a life and a family and a history…" I don't think Jet would think about it that way. He overlooks this aspect in the series, because all he cares about is getting back at the Fire Nation.

I liked this bit of dialogue: "I think that my old life is over with." "Want a new one?" But I didn't think the word "single-handedly" really fit for the next line.

This is a good beginning. It's wrought with all the emotions that shaped Jet as a person, and he sounds pretty in-character.

"Cherry blossoms spun in the air around me, as scattered as my thoughts." That sounds a lot like a Japanese song my chorus sang, it went something like, "Why do the cherry's new-blown blossoms scatter like restless thoughts?" (Do you know it?) I also liked the effect of one of the blossoms falling on Jet during the confrontation.