The war began at 2077. not 2161

Too blocky to read, need some paragraph separation and the spacing between quote marks and what's said really messes it up.

"This is an acceptable way of writing dialogue," the reviewer says with an annoyed look. "It's clear, it's simple, and you can tell what's being said and what isn't."

" On the other hand, " they continue, " this is most definitely not. The quotes go next to what's being said, not a space away. " The reviewer sighs and shakes their head. " It makes the problem of everything being in an ugly block of text way worse, plus it's harder to tell who is supposed to be speaking, especially without paragraph splits to keep track of where you're reading within the wall of illegible text. "

Okay...so in all likelihood you're not gonna see this, but I'll give it a shot.
I like this story, I really do, but my main problem is the dialogue spacing. to put it bluntly, its off-putting to see a wall of text; use that enter key! the bold helps...but it doesn't solve the fundamental
issue. other than that, my complaints are mainly minor. I like the idea, but I feel you could've done it better in practice.
(Please Update) ;]

the great war happened in 2077 not 2161, you might be thinking of the first fallout

i love the fallout effect its really good you should continue on it maybe go up to mass effect three with the lone wanderer

I don't think dr pepper would still be around. I think it would be something stupid like Mr. Fizz it something like that which would replace it.

Throw in more detail and tap that lovely enter key more. Also loads of grammatical errors and missing words. Get a beta reader. After that then this story will be golden and I'd read.

love it more plz

Holy wall of text, Batman!

Only problem i have with this is the spacing. its just a wall of text. other then that, its not bad

Would it be too much of a bother for some spacing between the sentences, would make it easier to read.

This is just bad.

Flamer: stems from Flamboyant which means overly dramatic and is the description for the stereotypical homosexual male

bud, the great war was in 2077, make sure you have the facts before writing

The one thing of note are the quotation marks, they are ANNOYING. Get it right, please, they go on the word itself, not the one in front.