How the hell is this a rewrite if your still using incorrect grammar a five year old would use. Do the readers a favor and use correct punctuation, proofread your own writing, stop changing tenses each sentence, and DEAR GOD please look up what subject-verb agreement.

Believe me or not, I used to read this a long time ago. I have to thank you, though. You were one of the many authors that inspired me to start writing on my own merit.

Really good

Bad story bro you made naruto know about things that was never said at that age plus it was Naruto who was in the wrong in the forest he was fighting against a kage level shinobi the smart thing to do was run and try to survive. I don't really like sasuke and I wish Sakura wasn't such a bitch in the story but you made Naruto look like sum smart ass and you let Naruto call sasuke a coward for copying Lee's moves but still makes Naruto look up to a man who copied over 1 thousand jutsus like really bro

Intelligente oui au moins 2 deuxième ex qui avec shino mais elle ne la jamais fait a part pour les examens chunin et encore car l'écris.

J'adore et cest tellement rare mais jiraya aurait très pu faire un sceau plus puissant j'espère quil le fera avant l'évasion.
Pour sakura elle ne peut que se blâmer.

Si naruto na le Niveau pour être ninja sasuke et encore moins sakura .

nice job my friend this was a very good story

You skipped a lot just to give Choji those wings.

You have some grammar issues due to missed spelled words. I am sure if you ran spell check it would tell you that there are no misspelled words however while that could be correct it is also wrong. Because you are using words that don't mean what they are being used for. He looked very dangerous but couldn't understand how he do such mission and now receive and injury. First I would add an s to Mission making it state more then one mission. Second now that should be the word not. And third the word should be any. By not using the correct word they are misspelled words.

I know that I am late and that you already have this marked as completed. I look back in my memory and see that Kakashi was on the lazy side big time I read about what Naurto asked him and though I do have my doubts I do see that he could have something along those lines to Naruto. I don't think that he honestly would but I do see that it is something that he could have said if he was truly ever asked that by Naruto.

Maybe the story should've stayed deleted. Good fucking god. Learn to spell. Learn to use commas. Learn to stick to a single fucking tense, Dumbass.

So they robb his stuff

You have a continuity error here. Jiraiya told Naruto before leaving Konoha that they were going to search for the next Hokage, yet he was still surprised when Jiraiya brought that up to Tsunade in this chapter.

As soon as you said you’re making Sakura an antagonist and people underestimate her intelligence just made me realize how much of a fucking god damn idiot you are. Who the hell would want to fucking read a Sakura antagonist story. Not even gonna look at the sequel . You’re disgusting