Pretty awesome lemon! I'd love to see more...or a sequel lol.

Is so fantastic, amazing...hot...*-*

I'm turned on by foreign languages, too... DERP. I said nothing O_O

Great story, by the way ;) keep it up!

ohhhh goooddd nooo my virgin eyes and virgin face
my virginity was stolen by this noooooooooeesss

sweet ;)

Great fic.

I'm a pretty harsh critic when it comes to sex scenes but this one I found quite enjoyable. The language used was mature and the imagery was well executed. It was also really sexy, so props.

As for things i would improve on, I would say that the beginning seemed a bit rushed..which is understandable because It was sort of a means to an end to set up this one shot, but perhaps drawing that out a bit would give the overall feel of the story a slower more even pace. Also theres one part that I didn't like:

After the line

"Maybe his little Jew didn't hate him as much as he acted."

I think that the action is also a little rushed, maybe adding a paragraph or two of the tension building up to the next paragraph would help.

Other than that. kick as job. :D

OMG that was AMAZING! You write really well and I've read a LOT of fics (tbh, a bit embarrassing how much I've actually read).

I'm begging for a sequel, PLEASE

x

I LOVED IT...really...is a scene hot :)

I LOVE SOOOOOOOO MUCH! write more fics like that! o / I'm the first to comment with very proud :D. VERY HOT

I need this tatoo *LOL