Well. I knew this one was going to hurt. But oh my. It's so beautiful. Obi-Wan's pain and anger just leap off the page. His loneliness, his fears, you've captured them all and put a hint of the past and the future in all of it. Qui-Gon's request that he be just a little defiant speaks volumes as to the pain he's in too, and how much he needs his Padawan. Incredible.

Excellent! Love the language. Love the angst

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Wow..
This was stunningly beautiful, both emotionally and aesthetically. It brought tears to my eyes. Thank you for writing this! Hope you have a lovely day!

Hauntingly well done. I liked it a lot and you did an amazing job with the characters.

Thanks for sharing this little gem of a character study. The voices are perfect, the characterizations are accurate, and your prose is beautiful. Love the touches of imagery like the scarred wooden floor of the temple practice room, polished to perfection in spite of the lightsaber scars...

Hauntingly written and beautifully wrought. Very well done indeed. :)

*SNIFF* Excellent. Love that you did this from Obi's POV in just this manner... *applauds*

What a riveting story. The opening line was... brilliant. Really, it was. I must have read it about five times. In a different order it wouldn't have been as solid- but whether by chance or by knowledge, you really got it.

I spent the better part of today trawling through your other fics apart from the Lineage series. In reality, I should do some summer reading for Uni, but I couldn't help myself when it came to these fics. They're all incredibly insightful, and this one especially.

Ohh, the hurt and grief ... is bleeding onto my screen ... Perfect pace and wording. Thank you so much!

Oh... How very beautiful. Heartwrenching and heartwarming at the same time.

''as though he is indeed wrought of white-blue glass, a translucent column of grief.''

I love this line.
And I loved the whole story.
Thank you for sharing!

I'm back again :p There is not much I can say for this story, I've only reached to the point when Thal dies and Qui Gon runs off by himself, but have not read further into that volume of JA, Funny I'm a sucker for Obi Wan suffering, but when he hits a rough spot in the novels, like when Tahl dies and Bant is angry at him and Qui Gon is thinking god knows what, I freeze in that spot for month dreading to read ahead.

Anyways I dunno if Qui Gon goes as far as to blame Obi Wan for Tahl's death, in light of the Padawan's injury or when he "demands" they went back to help the miner's settlement being attacked by the Absolutes, thus delaying the 'rescue'. Regardless I know Obi Wan doesn't need Qui Gon or anyone else to be his judge, jury and executioner, he is quite capable of being his own masochist's sadist, and needs no help when it comes to self-loathing-guilt-recrimination-worthlessness. The kid has self-esteem issues
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All I can say for sure is as always a magnificent story, filled with deep insight into Obi Wan's mind, thoughts and emotions, and into the precarious balance of his relation with Qui Gon. Of how much he strives to be a Jedi and how taxing it is for every being in general and for him in particular. Because lets face it he most have been born under a bad sign, to have his kind of luck, or lack of there off. Again moving and touching, had me crying all though out and I always love the cameos of Ali Alaan.

/There are too blasted many things to accept in his life right now./ Obi-Wan here (at 16?) is a man, accepting pain and the possibility of endless solitude. He is as cold as the Force and not until he meets Qui-Gon at the Healer Wing does anything remotely human surface - good writing, and yeah, a character piece not like your other pieces. I really liked the little girl and her handstand, that was sweet, and so was Ali-Anaan's plain helpfulness. It was like Ali had known Obi-Wan since he was Hi-Ru's age and knew the ins and outs of his psyche, but realized that talking was not what Obi-Wan needed at that point. Excellent story and well deserving of the 'angst' label.

Ohhhh I can't believe I didn't read this one! Damn work! Keeps me from the important stuff :)

It's so sad :( and so perfect, I always wanted to read a good fic post Tahl, and this one fits perfectly :)

I love Obi Wan how he always seems to accept physical pain as penance, he really believes he deserves whatever physical punishment comes to him, it's like "ok, this happened to me, but I deserved it because of this", but in here I feel he feels (yeah, yeah, the feelin part) himself tainted, I don't know. He questions The Force for the bad thing that happen, it's like a child who just learn that Santa is not real :S the force is not always good, and life is not black and white. Whatever, too much wine tonigh, I'm feeling philosophical.

Ohh by the way :) if you ever feel like writing about a singing Obi Wan (like in your fic dream with that WONDERFUL towel... I still daydream with that moment), I don't know, maybe you will feel like writing a story where Qui Gon learns the vocal skills of Obi Wan... In fact, I know you are thinking you should write that story (imagine me moving my fingers in front of you), you think this is a good idea for a fanfic... (I'm still moving my fingers, in case you forgot).

Aaanyway, I should go to bed :) Enjoy!