This chapter made me sad when you mentioned the past. It was such a good life, compared to the present.
Please keep up the story if you have time!
I'll always be interested in a new update!

Toast!
That last line melted the seriousness of the previous lines haha~~~

You had me at the edge of my seat there, when he was looking through the bounty book. I thought she was on to him, but I didn't expect that it came true...
AAAAAAHHHh can't wait to read through the next chapter!

Okay that made me laugh a little despite the serious tone of the story.
"Kurt Pierce?"
That's unusually normal in the world of One Piece when you have all these unnatural names.
But I love it!

very good fanfic

holy heck iM IN LOVE WITH THIS i solidly read through all of it just now djfkakgks

this hasnt been updated i but i'm gonna keep track of it in hopes of that it may update

i love your writing and your portrayal of all these characters so much, they are SPOT ON i've become invested in it hhhhh

at any rate you've done a hell of a good job (i'm so frazzled i wrote 'joob' gdi) on this and i am looking forward to any future updates!

peace

This is so good man. I need more, but I see you haven't written in a while... I haven't given up hope

Again, reviewing your story as requested. Very belatedly. Apologies for delay.

Must be honest about this, but when reading this chapter, felt like someone went overboard with a thesaurus.

Fancy vocabulary can be equated to special effects in movies. Use them for emphasis. Use them too much, movie becomes annoying to watch because an explosion is going off every 5 seconds. After a while becomes boring.

Same here. Too many bombastic words, too many descriptions, too many long and intricate sentences that garble up meaning of what you were originally going to say. Makes one reading feel impatient. Want you to get to the point already.

Story might be good, like the focus on Kuro very much, but required too much time trying to figure out what author was trying to say each sentence. After a while didn't feel like continuing. Shame, as it seems that you are skilled in writing, but just trying too hard and overdoing things.

Simplify. Be less verbose. Cut down on your unnecessary detailed descriptions. Remember this is not your school composition and you do not have to show off your vocabulary to get more points from teacher. Sometimes less is more.

Best advice can give you for now. Good luck.

As requested, reviewing your story.

Chapter 1:

A friendly word of warning: author's notes-only chapters are not allowed on FFN. Would advise to incude at least a few lines of actual story text to make this legit. Short teaser prologue would do the trick.

This is really good! I like how you describe certain parts of the story, like Kuro falling into the sea and the cunning method he used to hide from Marines. Kuro was ruthless in the way he used his dead crew members as a shield, but that's how he usually is.

I like your writing style as well, suits Kuro's personality. Keep up the good work :)

Kuro really is the most dangerous person in the east blue, I nearly forgot that. Smoker, Buggy and Luffy are on the Grandline, Arlong is in prison and Krieg has lost his fleet and armor. Sure, Kuro lost his ship and men and his choosen weapon but his main weapon was always his speed and intellect. Stealing a sword or two should not be to difficult for Kuro in a battle while replacing his armor is not easily possible for Krieg. Besides, Kuro was not active as a pirate for three years and Kriegs bounty was still just one million higher. Had he been active his would most likely been higher. And his battle skills would probably have been better too. His Shakushi against Luffy was highly ineffective, a good load of his men were still alive even after he hit them while only one marine was still alive after his attack on their ship (and the damage on the ship seems to indicate that he used Shakushi). So three years of not doing anything probably affected his handling of that technique.
8,000,000 shouldn't be too hard to capture, then again the normal bounty in the east blue is 3,000,000 so that is not your average pirate/bandit. Still, once properly armed Kuro should not have a too hard time, even if it's against large numbers.
I can't really say that I'm surprised at his lack of trust in Nelle. He always relied on himself and seeing how stupid Siam and Buchi were and Jangos amazing habit of hypnotising himself that seems to be a normal development.
It's interesting however that he still dreams of his time as Klahadore but it's hard to see what this could mean. Perhaps he really is wishing that he had choosen a normal live as butler and not tried the last stage of his plan. Perhaps the memories of all the hard work he put into that plan are haunting which makes the failure all the more bitter. Number two seems a bit unlikly but Kuro himself has already put some thought into number one and I don't know if thats just that or if his dreams are supposed to be some sort of warning that he should better not long for the too big things again.
Ah, well, just my thoughts. I'm looking forward for the next chapter.

Blackmail? Just what the hell did Kuro do again...?

Nice to see this story going on again. I wonder what you will give Kuro as weapon. A sword or something in that direction? He is after all not going to keep throwing his opponents against walls, is he? Then again with his speed that should work against 90-95 percent of the people in the east blue...

RE:
Ysaye, it really is pitiful, the tomfoolery he's gotten himself into. However there will be more satisfying fights later on with people of actual skill. A man like him was going easy.
Nelle would be an awful choice for that! She'd probably completely forget about their existance within a few hours, lol.

My, my... the poor Kuro really has taken a deep fall, hasn't he? Now he's struggling against mere street-children instead of dangerous pirates. Next thing he'll find himself being a baby-sitter to them because the inventor adopts them! :-P