Reviews for Disasteress Rage Forevermore |
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Guest chapter 3 . 10/9/2016 I don't really like the idea of Holly being an assasin before, so I stopped at Chapter 3 |
Necromancer Robert ShadowBlade chapter 15 . 11/27/2013 *gets in a tank and fires missiles* |
Necromancer Robert ShadowBlade chapter 14 . 11/27/2013 Ahh cute |
Necromancer Robert ShadowBlade chapter 11 . 11/27/2013 Doors Artemis love Holly |
Necromancer Robert ShadowBlade chapter 10 . 11/27/2013 Is Artemes in love with Holly |
Bookworm1756 chapter 1 . 3/22/2013 Oh no... |
Atremis Fowl chapter 18 . 11/22/2012 THIS IS AWESOME ! Artemies x Holly forever 3 |
Artemis Fowl chapter 9 . 11/22/2012 Poor Holly *sniff* |
Holly C. Fowl chapter 30 . 10/24/2012 I heart it! Love the sequel too! |
Galvanized goat chapter 14 . 8/24/2012 oh my god my heart is broken im crying i had to wipe my several times since i started typing i want to kill trouble whenever i read abook i like to make a character of my own in my mind to fix things until i can read the book again(like if im at school) this character is indestructable has the strength that could shame a troll Artemises intelligence and travels through time and i still cant think of a way out and im crying again :((((((((((((((((( but hopefully soon :)))))))))))))))))))))) if there is no happy i will become a shell |
Reality Hits Hard chapter 1 . 8/18/2012 NIce |
Electricboa chapter 30 . 8/9/2012 Well, after getting to the second chapter, and seeing that this is a sequel to another story, I went and read that one first. I've got to say that your writing is far better, to the point that I couldn't bring myself to finish reading Dragonwings' story. Personally, I would much rather see you rewrite the first story from scratch, really fill in a lot more of the meat, and change some things, specifically their names. That's one of the things that really stuck me as juvenile, the names were beyond over the top. The concept was good, but the execution was off. But, that's not really the point here, as that isn't your story. Apart from some minor errors, the writing was well done and you managed to weave in a classic three act structure to the story. Some of Holly and Artemis' scenes seemed OOC, but with Holly I suppose it's expected given the story. Personally, some of the more graphic scenes struck me as somewhat gratuitous, but that's more of a personal preference than anything else. All in all, I think the story could use a little polishing to fix up the errors and maybe work on some of the motivations behind the actions of some characters. I'd mostly point to the Council, since they more or less switch from punishing Holly to trying to help her a little too quickly and without much reasoning behind it. |
Ciousk chapter 30 . 8/7/2012 Awwww! Your welcome! I will be here for your next story too! |
HollyArty foeva chapter 30 . 8/3/2012 YAY! She BETTER say yes! PM me when the sequel is out? AHHH! I can't wait! UPDATE or uh… WRITE THE SEQUAL! (yeah, that's it) Peace, Love, CHEESE! •LIVE well. •LOVE always. •LIFE is good! *EAL* |
FowlFanGirl chapter 30 . 8/3/2012 AWW Yes she will Artemis! This was truely great so excited for the sequel! Thanks, FFG |